try to write a poem

@JamesMa (119)
China
November 2, 2007 10:51am CST
When I eye on your eyes feeling something special but shy. The wind is dry while my heart smiles. How time is fly! The charm is falling quite. So far away I can hardly make you mind. So long the day you are always on my mind. But in my dreams never try to hold you tihgt. Don't want aware find you aren't here by my side. I don't know the exact rules of writing a english poem, but to some degree, I just want to try and express some of my feelings.
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4 responses
• Philippines
19 Sep 08
Hi! JamesMa, Yeah, I like your poem. Indeed you have the capability of creating such poem. Develop your skills in writing so that one day you will see yourself creating a poem. When making a poem try to consider the rhymes, the spelling, stanzas, etc. Good luck to your next poem!
@JamesMa (119)
• China
22 Sep 08
Dear, it is very kind of you. Thank you very much. I will insist.
@ksha777 (95)
• Philippines
22 Jun 08
Just keep on writing then by doing that you can rate yourself as if you a re improving or what. There's some guidelines in writing.. when i was in high school, my teacher tackles that...As far as I can remember by Writing a poem, there must be a rhyme, the words at the every end of your lines must have sound as the same, so it has a rhyme, the other is you have to count every words so it will be the same to the next stanza or next line also known as tulang may banghay) the other one ,it can be a free styles, say whatever you wanted to say with or without rhyme it is fine as we call it in our native language as "tulang malaya" . Freestyle is good for it allows you to express freely what do you wanted to say without counting every words and and following the same sound so as to have a rhyme. I know you can improve your skill in writing a poem, don't stop and keep on writing, it might help you in the future ... it's a talent because not all can create poems, it is a given talent from God.
@JamesMa (119)
• China
22 Sep 08
I am deeply appreciated for your encouragement. From your suggestion so that I can know you know much about pomen. Millions of thanks.
@drannhh (15002)
• United States
9 Nov 07
Didn't mean to write a poem Don't have to write a bit But monkey does as monkey sees So had to enter in it. Rules to write a poem by In English language? My, oh, my! They used to have some I'm quite sure, but now the rules are all a blur. Alliteration? Meter? Scansion? Rhyme? These rules are broken all the time!
@JamesMa (119)
• China
15 Apr 08
Maybe, you are right. However, it will be read with a better feeling through with a bit. For the Chinese traditional poem, it is very common and basic to write a poem with a bit.
• United States
3 Nov 07
Sitting here on MyLot, Making new buddies, Shirking responsibilities, Typing till my fingers freeze... Jeez! I forgot to feed the fire!