A poem which i wrote by myself, what do you think of it?
By lovelemonlee
@lovelemonlee (235)
China
March 19, 2008 9:08pm CST
When i was a sophomore, i worte a poem, which i still proud of it. Though It's very short, and not so good at rhyming, but for me who isn't really good at writing things, it is not easy. So today i post it to share with you. What do you think of it? Post your advices, opinions.
People around have all fallen in love,
while i am still waiting, quitely.
'cause i know: at some place in the world,
There is my Mr Right.
One day he will come close to me,
Holding my hands, saying gentlely to me:
"Hey, dear! I'm your ROMEO!"
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5 responses
@lovelemonlee (235)
• China
20 Mar 08
Thank you for your encouragement, i've never thought of publishing my own book before. And i've alreaday found my Romeo! ..=)
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@sophialin (2677)
• China
20 Mar 08
hi,lemonlee,i'm similar to you.though i'm 25 years old already,i won't give up looking for my mr.right until he comes out some day.i believe that there's someone waiting for me on another part in the world and we'll meet each other some day.
i'm convinced in one's life,there's something must stick to,something you never compromise.
come on!
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@lovelemonlee (235)
• China
20 Mar 08
Yes, i'm totally agree with you on your viewpoint. I've already met my Mr. Right, and i think you should keep looking , and you will meet him sooner or later!
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@daeckardt (6237)
• United States
20 Mar 08
This sounds like it was written from the heart. That is the best way. Other than some minor spelling errors, it is ok. In poetry, grammar is not as important as other forms of writing so I will not comment on that. As far as everything else, you are doing great. Think positive about your abilities!!!
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@1hopefulman (45123)
• Canada
16 Sep 08
I like it. It's full of optimism! That's what makes the world continue. That's what give us hope. The glass is never half empty but half full. We never despair for long. Desperation disappears like the morning dew as joy arrives. Hope, joy, peace love will triumph over all the negative evil forces in then universe. Go away bad day! Come good day!
