a song by me..

August 1, 2011 9:14am CST
this is a song i wrote about 2 years ago. it's called "you're ok." it isn't one of my best, and i suppose it isn't as good without actually being able to hear it either.. but a few people had said i should post some of my songs.. so here goes.. 1. thoughts are never noticed easily, trusting only whats unspoken to me, gets me, into, trouble. moving slowly toward a moment, trapped in time with blurry content, will do nothing, but burst my bubble. clenched fists, down by my side, trying to run, yet not trying to hide, does nothing for, you. here i am, standing screaming, barely moving while my world keeps spinning, begging, to hear what you'd, do. chorus. you, stop my breath where it stands, and you freeze my heart to the core, you take every piece of pain that i've felt, and you lay it flat on the floor, you move my soul to a reach unknown, and leave me, a battered broken mess, and i'm hanging on, swinging on hooks, waiting for you to say yes. yes, you're ok. 2. you never fail to make me breathless, a feeling that ends up leaving me restless, your laughter through my tears, pure, torment. but what if i took a step out of line? and went a little too far this time? and threw myself, right out of this, moment? would you already be there, standing waiting? taking your time while my heart starts tainting? with arms outstretched, right on, cue? or would you play the victim under pressure? and twist the knife, another turn for good measure? and through yourself down there, too? chorus. you stop my breath where it stands, and you freeze my heart to the core, you take every piece of pain i've felt, and lay it, flat on the floor, you move my soul to a reach unknown, and leave me, a battered broken mess, and i'm hanging on, twisting on hooks, waiting for you to say yes, yes, you're ok. bridge. why, do you burn my bridges? and why, do you tease my soul? and why, are you all i've never wanted? but all now i've come to know? why, are you anything but perfect? but my flaws are largest when compared? and why does it hurt me more, when you finally act like you ever cared? chorus. you stop my breath where it stands, and you freeze my heart to the core, you take every piece of pain i've felt, and lay it flat on the floor, you move my soul to a reach unknown, and leave me, a battered broken mess, and i'm hanging on, swinging on hooks, waiting for you to say yes, yes we're ok. so that's one of my songs. i hope you like it and i hope some people get it and can relate. but if you don't like it, thats ok too, because it's kind of crap. lol!
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@Orson_Kart (4309)
• United Kingdom
1 Aug 11
Is this about being tickled? It's certainly not crap and if you can sing it along to the tune of "The Runaway Train" I think you have got a hit.
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1 Aug 11
the runaway train? .. not exactly lol. and yes, its about being tickled. i'm glad you can tell.
• Australia
1 Aug 11
Yes i think the lyrics are great! I would love to hear it the way that you intended it to be.. You never know what your interpretation of someone else's work is going to be like when it is something like words in a song. Without the music beat or voice to go by it makes it challenging. I can relate to the song however and think i understand the strong emotion and meaning in the song. From the heart, that is where the best music comes from.
• United Kingdom
1 Aug 11
Just wanted to tell you that I don't! (Well, not in public anyway)
1 Aug 11
aww thanks so much that means a lot.. it's got quite a rocky tune to it, when its sang. it's quite daughtry / 3 doors down-esque. it started off as me writing a page about how i was feeling, and then i mixed it all together into a song. it's about a bad bad relationship i was in x
• United States
1 Aug 11
I think you have done a great job on your song!Its fun to write songs and poetry and let our true self out.Self expression is what its all about in life.
1 Aug 11
it lets me get out how i'm feeling, and what better way than to try and be poetic about it :)