Seventeen

@inertia4 (27605)
United States
December 18, 2015 6:05am CST
Seventeen, that was the number he was thinking of. Under normal circumstances it would have been a passing thought. But not this time. For some reason, he could not get that number out of his mind. No matter what he did to think of something else, the number seventeen kept popping into his mind. It was the the only thought he had when he woke up and the only one he had when he went to bed. This went on for seventeen years. Now, seventeen years later, he woke up in the morning and there was that thought again. The number seventeen. Now, this was the seventeenth day of the seventeenth year since this started. It was the seventh month, on the seventeenth day. He was waiting for the bus and he just could not stop thinking of the number seventeen. Only now, this day, it was much much worse. There was no other thought but the number seventeen. It was 5:00 o’clock in the evening, which, in military time would be the seventeenth hour. So, it was the seventh month, on the seventeenth day, the seventeenth hour and slowly approaching the seventh minute. The seconds were ticking by but the bus was nowhere in sight. Now the time was 5:17 and 5 seconds. He saw a cab and waved it down. As he stepped off the curb to get the cab, the time was exactly 5:17 and 17 seconds. Out of nowhere came an 18 wheeler truck, and hit him dead on, killing him instantly on impact. The thought was no longer. Copyright © 2012 Steven Cetta All Rights Reserved Image Credit : CoolText.com Tags : inertia4, Seventeen, inertia4stories
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@Jessicalynnt (47789)
• Centralia, Missouri
19 Dec 15
might want to die after obsessing and fixating so much
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@inertia4 (27605)
• United States
21 Dec 15
Maybe so, but this is all fiction and fun. Think of it as a mental breakdown. Maybe then it would make sense to stress.
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• Centralia, Missouri
23 Dec 15
@inertia4 just saying a body who did that might be relieved it was over
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@inertia4 (27605)
• United States
24 Dec 15
@Jessicalynnt I understand. That might be possible. I never went crazy so I wouldn't know.
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@mommaj (22721)
• United States
5 Jan 16
This was so eerie it made me think of Alfred Hitchcock. I loved this. It kept on building up and you just knew something was going to happen. Great writing.
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@inertia4 (27605)
• United States
5 Jan 16
Thank you. When I wrote this I read it back to myself and thought it had a Twilight Zone flavor to it.
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@mommaj (22721)
• United States
5 Jan 16
@inertia4 Oh yes, but the older ones. I didn't see the repeats this year. Dang! I love those shows. The ones from the 60s are awesome!
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@inertia4 (27605)
• United States
6 Jan 16
@mommaj I watched some of them on New Years weekend. I always liked the Twilight Zones. And I also liked the Outer Limits and the One Step Beyond shows. And lets not forget Night Gallery.
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@softbabe44 (5902)
• Vancouver, Washington
19 Dec 15
Excellent writing
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@inertia4 (27605)
• United States
21 Dec 15
Thank you very much. I appreciate that.
• Vancouver, Washington
22 Dec 15
@inertia4 Your very welcome can't wait till the next part.
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@inertia4 (27605)
• United States
22 Dec 15
@softbabe44 There is no next part. That is the little short story. But I will be posting more of them.
@sugartoes (40009)
• Greencastle, Indiana
1 Feb 16
holy cow what a way to die that's HORRIBLE, glad I don't think about something like that needless to say that was the last thing on his mind right?
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@inertia4 (27605)
• United States
3 Feb 16
I hear that. I am glad you enjoyed the story. I like the dark side when I write.
@OreoBrownie (3526)
• Elberton, Georgia
19 Dec 15
That's some tore. You are very talented.
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@inertia4 (27605)
• United States
21 Dec 15
Thank you. I don't see myself as talented. I like to come up with stories like this from time to time.
• United States
18 Dec 15
Wow I love this story inertia! It is eery and reminiscent of a sort of twilight zone. You are an excellent writer my friend. Thanks for sharing it with us.
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@inertia4 (27605)
• United States
18 Dec 15
Thank you very much. I really do appreciate your comment. I try. I know, it does has that Twilight Zone flavor to it.
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@amadeo (63936)
• United States
18 Dec 15
thank you for sharing this.When I was 17.Oh!well forget it.lol
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@inertia4 (27605)
• United States
18 Dec 15
I remember being 17. That was a long time ago now. LOL. But I have great memories from back then.