Suddendeath poem challenge: Water!

Centralia, Missouri
February 20, 2016 9:01am CST
You know what day it is, Sudden death poem Saturdays! A repeat of the rules (for those not already aware) are thus. Write a poem of any style, using the 5 words that I will give you here in a minute. Any type of poem is fine. Try to write it in under an hour or in one sitting (this is only to try and keep us from spending too much time letting our inner editor pick away at what is supposed to be spontaneous). You can use any tense of a word (ing, plural, whatever). Oh and either post your entry up here, or comment with a link so we can enjoy each other’s! Today’s words are: drenched, pouring, wet, dripping, puddle Mine is below, not my best work, but hey, hit the hour mark so it is what it is, lol! Stepping out the door, stepping in the rain. Little girl is skipping, down the country lane. Water is a pouring, dripping ever down. She is smiling hugely, no trace of a frown. Despite getting drenched, puddles she is hopping Clothes are dripping, but she isn’t stopping. Never minded getting wet, rain just added to her fun. Every day she would be out to play, in rain or wind or sun. Childlike love of all things simple, fun so easy found. Just like rain that was falling, swiftly to the ground. Adding to her adventures, something that she valued. Until she got a chill, then sick sneezing, “Achoo!”
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• Eugene, Oregon
20 Feb 16
Football boys had to huddle in a puddle, mid-field was a trench, they all got drenched. Wet fans in the stands under leaky umbrellas wished they'd stayed home with the really smart fellas. They all groaned in unison, acapella. The rain it kept pouring, made the game boring, but the home team scored and all spirits soared, so everyone started roaring.
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• Centralia, Missouri
20 Feb 16
Very neat, I like how the water words weren't the focus here, just the affect ON the focus. Very lovely!
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@just4him (75828)
• Green Bay, Wisconsin
20 Feb 16
Well done!
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• Preston, England
21 Feb 16
@JamesHxstatic sometimes if we are enjoying ourselves we forget how bad the weather is - nicely captured in your poem here
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@KristenH (17346)
• Cuyahoga Falls, Ohio
20 Feb 16
Great poetry challenge, Jessa. Here's my shot at this for this weekend. Alas, the sunshine is outside to melt the snow and to brightened the day, No more weird forecasts this winter, please, about being drenched by rain, I hope for no more 50% or more chances of snow to come over our way, Dried up puddles on the ground and on the roads, I can't complain. Let there be annual flowers ready to grow and sprout, when it's finally spring, For the grass should be wet by rain, a hose with nozzle or watering can, It should be dripping with moist from the dew drops every beautiful morning, And pouring with luscious colors to welcome Mother Nature's grand plan.
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• Centralia, Missouri
20 Feb 16
Hmmnmm, are you maybe ready for spring? lol! I loved it, yours often feel well more indepth than mine.
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@KristenH (17346)
• Cuyahoga Falls, Ohio
20 Feb 16
@Jessicalynnt Yes I am! It's 60 over here in Ohio. But next week and weekend, back to the 20-30s and snow. Aww thanks Jessa.
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• Centralia, Missouri
20 Feb 16
@KristenH drizzle on and off maybe a jacket but no more today, and overcast, my fav kind of day
@paigea (19482)
• Canada
20 Feb 16
I enjoy your poems. Here is an attempt. Dry parched land. Farmers watch the sky and worry And dream of puddles; Drenched, life giving soil. Rain pouring down and Dripping off the seedlings. Hope for wet fields. Hope rain will come in time To feed the hungry.
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• Centralia, Missouri
20 Feb 16
Very lovely and often true, that is something farmers fear, the lack of water. I also like you wrote about not having the things I listed!
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• Philippines
20 Feb 16
Rain is pouring so hard; I have no umbrella on hand. I am all wet now; clothes are drenched. I run to a safe place but oh what a stench! Water dripped and formed puddles under my feet. Where oh where is Mr. Sun? We need to meet!
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• Centralia, Missouri
20 Feb 16
you know there is truth in what you wrote, I can never find my umbrella when it rains! Lovely poem
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@Drosophila (16897)
• Ireland
20 Feb 16
I hate this pouring rain. Wading across the wet puddle is such a pain The whole world feels drenched, Happiness feels like a bolt, waiting to be wrenched.
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• Centralia, Missouri
20 Feb 16
very lovely, and amusing, doesnt it rain tons in Ireland? That's what i had read anyways! Lovely poem!
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@Drosophila (16897)
• Ireland
20 Feb 16
@Jessicalynnt it does and sucks
@simone10 (22294)
• Louisville, Kentucky
20 Feb 16
What a great poem! I wish I could join but I haven't written any poems in about 40 years.
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@paigea (19482)
• Canada
20 Feb 16
If I can try, anyone can try.
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• Centralia, Missouri
20 Feb 16
@paigea has the right of it @simone10 there is nothing stopping you but you! It doesnt have to be good, I dont think the one I wrote today was particularly good, it's the doing and the having fun that's the point!
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@LadyDuck (103000)
• Switzerland
20 Feb 16
Congratulations, you wrote a great poem, you know that I am unable to write poems.
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• Centralia, Missouri
20 Feb 16
lol, I still think you might be able too, but I can deff see it being rather hard. I have a feeling if I tried to write a poem in spanish it would be rather bad. your English is tons better than my second language though, lol!
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@LadyDuck (103000)
• Switzerland
21 Feb 16
@Jessicalynnt I think I could write poems in French, because I spoke French every day for 25 years, English is another matter.
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• Centralia, Missouri
21 Feb 16
@LadyDuck I work backwards, which might work for you, even in a second language. I figure out where the line needs to end often using a online rhyming dictionary, and then I write lines that end with my chosen words. Not always, but often. Then again, not all poems need to rhyme.
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• Budennovsk, Russian Federation
20 Feb 16
HoHoHo! Ready. I was returning from the market. My coat was wonderful, but wet. I saw old dog that wasn't barking Rain dripping looked like that of sweat. I stopped beside him, getting drenched. The dog was tired, i was puddled. My mercy woke up and I clenched Poor pet. I think he was then puzzled. Tears pouring started in a minute, I couldn't see a thing at all. For human heart there is no limit... I brought the dog into my hall.
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• Centralia, Missouri
20 Feb 16
as always I look forward to yours, English isn't your first language is it? If so, that makes these doubly impressive! Lovely piece!
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• Centralia, Missouri
21 Feb 16
@TypicalRussian rhymingdictionary.com .... don't feel bad. I doubt you are the only one that does this. I know I OFTEN do. I have a feel for where I want the poem to go, use the above mentioned website, and write the line to end with the words I want!
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• Midland, Michigan
24 Mar 16
That's excellent, typical. I use rhymezone.com for my limericks mostly. Whatever works. We know so many words but when we want certain ones they aren't always at the tip of our minds when needed.
• Greece
8 Mar 16
so here it is: My husband woke me with his snoring, Or was it rain - outside it's pouring? I let the cat in, drenched right through Her paws are wet, my floor is too, Her dripping fur has made a puddle - The day has started in a muddle.
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• Centralia, Missouri
8 Mar 16
I loved it! I can picture a wet dripping annoyed kitty!
• Midland, Michigan
24 Mar 16
Very funny first two lines, Dale. Sometimes it is hard to discern if that's the rain we hear in the night or something else entirely.
@mammots (3299)
• Philippines
21 Feb 16
Oh Rain ... when are you going to start pouring? Our land needs to be drenched... Our peoples thirst need to be quenched ... Oh Rain ... tears and sweat are dripping. Oh Rain ... dont turn our rivers to puddle! Our carabaos backs need to get wet ... Our water thats where we get ... Oh Rain ... with knees bent were ready to haggle.
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• Centralia, Missouri
21 Feb 16
Now, this is quite unique, almost a prayer, with a request sent to the weather. I loved it, very lovely poem!
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@mammots (3299)
• Philippines
21 Feb 16
@Jessicalynnt Thank you! I'm very happy that you like my poem.
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• Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
20 Feb 16
The rain, drenched by its ceaseless pouring, I stand still, fascinated at the pure water, Surely Heaven's gift, dripping down onto the puddle of my life.
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• Centralia, Missouri
20 Feb 16
very visual, can hear and see what you write. Lovely poem!
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• Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
20 Feb 16
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@Inlemay (17038)
• South Africa
22 Feb 16
you are mastering these poems
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• Centralia, Missouri
23 Feb 16
I dont know, this one seemed flat
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@Inlemay (17038)
• South Africa
24 Feb 16
@Jessicalynnt I am about to do a 5km walk this evening in the rain - its for charity and I have my raincoat ready but no wet boots - i dont own any. so your poem suits my afternoon.
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• Centralia, Missouri
24 Feb 16
@Inlemay I am not sure they make wet boots that would comfie for walking unless one considers water proofing hikers or something lol, have fun!
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@just4him (75828)
• Green Bay, Wisconsin
20 Feb 16
Cute poem. Well done. I've given up on them - sorry.
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• Centralia, Missouri
20 Feb 16
awe and yours were always so good!
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@just4him (75828)
• Green Bay, Wisconsin
21 Feb 16
@Jessicalynnt Thank you, but I just can't do spur of the moment poetry. If I do, it's God inspired and I need to have pencil and paper on hand or I lose the poem. I haven't even had one of those in a while either.
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• Centralia, Missouri
21 Feb 16
@just4him I've learned that while my best poetry is inspired, to me that was an excuse not to try. These little exercises have taught me that we can force through roadblocks and achieve results. Now, the results are often not the greatest, as in this case. I did not get what I wanted from this poem, a lovely highlight of the joy of a child playing in the rain, but to me, the fact that despite feeling uninspired, I managed to stagger on and create is a win in my book. This is more about the process than the end result, which is why I always suggest time limits on the writing.
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• Midland, Michigan
24 Mar 16
Maybe there's a word in one language or another that would rhyme with 'valued'? Cute story and poem, Jessa, even if you threw it together quickly.
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• Centralia, Missouri
24 Mar 16
Hnnmmm, possibly. I use online rhyming dictionaries when I get stumped
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• Midland, Michigan
24 Mar 16
@Jessicalynnt I do too, and maybe that is the closest one can get? It sort of works if looked at sideways, lol. I still thought it was great even though you did it in a pinch.
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• Centralia, Missouri
25 Mar 16
@MarshaMusselman well I appreciate that, and am glad you enjoyed
@vandana7 (53469)
• India
21 Feb 16
I should be excused ...Non-native English speaker..
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• Centralia, Missouri
21 Feb 16
lol, you dont have too if you dont want too, but I will note I see many on here who aren't and somehow manage the prettiest pieces, so I don't think it's impossible, but I cant even begin to imagine how hard!
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@alberello75 (9830)
• Genova, Italy
20 Feb 16
Beautiful poem. Unfortunately I do not have the creativity to be able to participate in this challenge. I can only write aphorisms like this: "Learn to get away with yourself, because in the dark, not even your shadow follows you!"
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• Centralia, Missouri
20 Feb 16
Then write one with the 5 words! Not all poems have to rhyme, some are just like what you wrote!
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• Greece
8 Mar 16
Great fun, well done - ,think it's time for me to rhyme and accept the challenge!
• Preston, England
21 Feb 16
Another great challenge - looking forward to playing with it
@celticeagle (109435)
• Boise, Idaho
20 Feb 16
Oh, my that does sound interesting. Lots of great poems about rain, wet, drenching and etc.