Unfinished

@sol_cee (16933)
Saint Vincent And The Grenadines
April 17, 2016 11:41pm CST
I saw this blog post from a very talented Filipina writer. It’s a challenge she set for herself: to write something, anything for thirty days, nonstop. I find it inspiring, doable. A task I think I can keep myself inclined to doing since I need some kind of diversion right at this moment. So here I am with Day 1. A gloomy Monday spent at the office with nothing to do but endless paperwork. If only we can extend the weekend. Wishful thinking. While on the train, my mind was elsewhere, weaving lines after lines of blurry afterthoughts. It’s been a long while since I wrote something which resembled a poem. Gloomy weather always provokes the miserable poet in me. Thought you’d wanna drown in my misery too. Slowly fading You are And it breaks me into pieces. What started Perfect, sweet Is now a chasm, desolate. Devoid of all Emotions Yet I’m bleeding, lifeless. Was holding on To nothing But lousy broken promises. Must I regret The days I kissed the ground you walked. … … … A fool I was to believe Your love was true Eternal. … … … As you can see, some lines are missing. Maybe I’d find the courage to complete this trash. Or maybe I’ll let it stay unfinished. Forever.
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@JudyEv (130708)
• Bunbury, Australia
20 Apr 16
I think your poem has great potential. You should finish it one day. It's very good.
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@sol_cee (16933)
• Saint Vincent And The Grenadines
21 Apr 16
Thanks for that pat in the back. I need another gloomy weather though.
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@salonga (27957)
• Philippines
23 Apr 16
It is not a trash my dear. I enjoyed reading every line and hope you finish it soon.
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@sol_cee (16933)
• Saint Vincent And The Grenadines
23 Apr 16
Hey ma'am. Where have you been?
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@salonga (27957)
• Philippines
26 Apr 16
@sol_cee Oh dear, I am too busy researching for my Sunday School classes.
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@sol_cee (16933)
• Saint Vincent And The Grenadines
26 Apr 16
@salonga What classes?
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@1hopefulman (31710)
• Canada
22 Apr 16
I certainly have been there. I like it!
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@sol_cee (16933)
• Saint Vincent And The Grenadines
22 Apr 16
You mean you like the feeling when you were there?
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@1hopefulman (31710)
• Canada
22 Apr 16
@sol_cee No, I like the poem, even though your poem is about a bird and not exactly what I saw in the poem.
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@sol_cee (16933)
• Saint Vincent And The Grenadines
22 Apr 16
@1hopefulman birds do have love life right?
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• Canada
20 Apr 16
To those who can relate...you expressed the thought very well-even with add about the missing and unfinished verse and the concept of eternity-actually, I like that a lot.
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@sol_cee (16933)
• Saint Vincent And The Grenadines
21 Apr 16
How do you say thanks in Hebrew?
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• Canada
22 Apr 16
@sol_cee "todah" is how you say thanks:)
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@sol_cee (16933)
• Saint Vincent And The Grenadines
22 Apr 16
@HebrewGreekStudies Todah for today and the other day.
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@ridingbet (57900)
• Philippines
20 Apr 16
if i were you, i will keep the lines missing, because these phrases are already good and comprehensible
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@sol_cee (16933)
• Saint Vincent And The Grenadines
21 Apr 16
I imagine you saying that with you holding a needle and your right eyebrow raised. lol
@ridingbet (57900)
• Philippines
22 Apr 16
@sol_cee i am not into witchcraft.
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@sol_cee (16933)
• Saint Vincent And The Grenadines
22 Apr 16
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@KnehKnah (3491)
• Philippines
21 Apr 16
You are into great thoughts! I will be waiting for the completion of the lines, my dear Sol!
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@sol_cee (16933)
• Saint Vincent And The Grenadines
21 Apr 16
Why, thank you for that warm appreciation ma'am. You always have kind words to everyone.
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@KnehKnah (3491)
• Philippines
22 Apr 16
@sol_cee Because I could feel the poet in you. Know what? I hope I have a richer vocabulary (like you), & more exposure (reading, trying to write more, etc), in poetry. I just love its way of expressing a writer's joy, sadness, grief, disbelief & other emotions. Gosh!
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@bluesa (14424)
• Johannesburg, South Africa
20 Apr 16
@sol_cee , it is not trash, I can relate to the perfect sweet start and the broken promises. Paperwork is dull.
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@sol_cee (16933)
• Saint Vincent And The Grenadines
21 Apr 16
It's a never ending cycle. Shards of broken promises.
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@bluesa (14424)
• Johannesburg, South Africa
25 Apr 16
@sol_cee you're right!
@DianneN (82720)
• United States
19 Apr 16
I didn't realize it was unfinished until you mentioned it. I hope you weren't writing about yourself.
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@sol_cee (16933)
• Saint Vincent And The Grenadines
21 Apr 16
It's the third person point of view of the robin to a tree. Or vice versa. Thanks for dropping by Mrs. B. O. D.
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@DianneN (82720)
• United States
22 Apr 16
@sol_cee Good to know and lol
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@SIMPLYD (81659)
• Philippines
19 Apr 16
Oh, was that unfinished ? It's actually a beautiful poem and to me it's finished with you declaring that you were a fool to believe the love was true and eternal .
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@sol_cee (16933)
• Saint Vincent And The Grenadines
21 Apr 16
Your love story with your husband is true and eternal.
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@SIMPLYD (81659)
• Philippines
22 Apr 16
@sol_cee Yes . I always pray for that .
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@puddleglum (1415)
• United States
18 Apr 16
I hope you fill in the lines, I really like the poem.
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@sol_cee (16933)
• Saint Vincent And The Grenadines
21 Apr 16
I'm still stuck. I guess I need another gloomy weather.
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• United States
21 Apr 16
@sol_cee Haha. The inspiration is bound to return sometime, there's always more rain.
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@MGjhaud (20679)
• Philippines
18 Apr 16
ive got few unfinished myself too. some of them are more than 5 years old as far as i can remember.. the outcome is more beautiful when youre writing it as it occurs or feelin it.
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@sol_cee (16933)
• Saint Vincent And The Grenadines
21 Apr 16
Where are those treasures?
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@MGjhaud (20679)
• Philippines
22 Apr 16
in a shoe box..
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@BelleStarr (39631)
• United States
5 May 16
lol Well I hope you get sunshine soon because that is indeed a poem about gloom!!
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@sol_cee (16933)
• Saint Vincent And The Grenadines
5 May 16
doom and gloom. lol
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@scheng1 (24748)
• Singapore
23 Apr 16
Anyway you have written something, so that is a good start. i think when we have the habit to write, it does not matter what we write, we will definitely write something.
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@sol_cee (16933)
• Saint Vincent And The Grenadines
23 Apr 16
Right. Asking us not to write is like asking us not to breathe.
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@Micmac (9281)
23 Apr 16
Deep poem. Nicely written poetry.
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@sol_cee (16933)
• Saint Vincent And The Grenadines
25 Apr 16
Thanks. It is still unfinished though.
@CRK109 (14433)
• United States
21 Apr 16
I'm not sure why you call it trash. I think it's a clear picture of heartache.
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@sol_cee (16933)
• Saint Vincent And The Grenadines
21 Apr 16
It is! Thanks for convincing me.
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@just4him (124505)
• Green Bay, Wisconsin
20 Apr 16
Actually it isn't trash at all. It's full of meaning and deep reflection. Beautiful.
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@sol_cee (16933)
• Saint Vincent And The Grenadines
21 Apr 16
Kind words do make us feel good. Thank you.
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@AnneEJ (4984)
• Dollard-Des-Ormeaux, Quebec
18 Apr 16
Very good. I try to write something every day but don't always succeed.
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@sol_cee (16933)
• Saint Vincent And The Grenadines
21 Apr 16
There's always the next day. I am now to Day 4. 26 days to go.
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@LadyDuck (171600)
• Switzerland
18 Apr 16
Your poem is good, I hope you can find the time and the courage to complete the missing lines.
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@sol_cee (16933)
• Saint Vincent And The Grenadines
21 Apr 16
Another rainy day will set the mood. Thanks for the kind words.
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@jaboUK (54877)
• United Kingdom
18 Apr 16
I really think the poem is very good. It's odd how a lot of poets have to be miserable before they can write.
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@sol_cee (16933)
• Saint Vincent And The Grenadines
21 Apr 16
I can't write happy poems like you. Odd yes.
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@Teep11 (7121)
• United States
26 Apr 16
Sounds good so far. What a deep poetic piece. There's always something that will get those poetic juices flowing.