How is my grammer ? Did I get it right ?

@Iqbaal (69)
Semarang, Indonesia
May 25, 2016 9:28am CST
When I was 5 years old. I loved natual scenery. My father and I would go to the beach every sunday morning. I wore the sandles which had Tom and Jerry pictures on it. We used to ride bicycle. My father drove the bike , and I used to sat on the carrier. We used to travel for 5 km far . After we arrived , we used to see the sun rise . The sun came out, it looked like from the bench of the earth . The waves rolled on the sand , and the warbles of the birds sounded melodic . I was looking for seashell on the sand of the beach. I brought the plastic bag and I caught the little crabs then I put the little crabs in the plastic bag . We used to jog on the seashore and Inhaled the fresh morning air . We made the castle from the sand . And swam in the shallow water , and we used to catch the fish used fish net in the river near the sea , We got many fish . We went to home , and my mother cooked it , and made it the fried fish , and we ate the fried fish together .
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@jaboUK (54435)
• United Kingdom
25 May 16
You did pretty well, and I enjoyed reading it. It's actually 'grammar', not 'grammer', and 'sandals' not sandles. I only say because you asked if you got things right, I don't mean to criticise.
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@Iqbaal (69)
• Semarang, Indonesia
25 May 16
Thank you for your help :)
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@jaboUK (54435)
• United Kingdom
25 May 16
@Iqbaal You are welcome.
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@marlina (74742)
• Canada
25 May 16
Lovely memories from your childhood.
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@Iqbaal (69)
• Semarang, Indonesia
25 May 16
Thaks , everyone must have lovely memories as well
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@bunnybon7 (36883)
• Holiday, Florida
25 May 16
grammer pretty good for foreign country person. did you also eat the crab?
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@Iqbaal (69)
• Semarang, Indonesia
25 May 16
thanks :) , Yes I did , I like seafood , especially crab and tuna
@zarlamain (25137)
• United States
25 May 16
The commas should be next to the words.
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@Iqbaal (69)
• Semarang, Indonesia
25 May 16
Yeah, thank you :)
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@zarlamain (25137)
• United States
25 May 16
@Iqbaal Your welcome!
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@Macarrosel (7551)
• Philippines
26 May 16
Are you serious in asking about your grammar? Well, for me it's fine but honestly you have sentences that you wrote wrongly.
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@Iqbaal (69)
• Semarang, Indonesia
26 May 16
Yes, I'm serious in asking about grammar. It was my home work, my teacher asked me to write past habit story
@akalinus (17275)
• United States
25 May 16
Since you asked, and only because you asked, grammar is spelled with an a and not an e. It sounds like you have some lovely memories of your childhood. I think you had fun.
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@Iqbaal (69)
• Semarang, Indonesia
25 May 16
Thanks :)
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@amadeo (67587)
• United States
25 May 16
sounds good to me there.
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