A JJ Sort of Post - And Then There Were Seven!

@JudyEv (121368)
Bunbury, Australia
December 13, 2016 10:15pm CST
Donnybrook, Western Australia, now has a local radio station. This has given local writers the chance to have their stories and poems broadcast over the air. I thought I'd share this one with you. I don't know if they'll use it but perhaps they will. And Then There Were Seven The hunter slid behind a tree. Up ahead, he'd spotted a deer nibbling on a branch. He eased a cartridge into the breach, cocked the gun and lifted it to his shoulder. Then he ever so slowly peered round the trunk of the tree, aimed just below the deer's left ear and squeezed the trigger. His senses thrilled to the smell of gunpowder and he watched the deer crumple to the snow, its blood staining a bright red patch. He was amazed to see a second deer near the first; its head high but seemingly unafraid. Shaking with excitement, he eased another cartridge into the gun, cocked it and dropped the second deer neatly beside its mate. A cough and the crack of a branch sent him back behind his tree. He hadn't noticed anyone around. He froze and waited. There was another cough then a booming voice split the quiet air. "Donner and Blitzen. Some b**stard's shot Cupid and Comet!' The hunter tiptoed away keeping the tree between himself and a sad group of seven reindeer and Santa Claus.
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@LadyDuck (152501)
• Switzerland
14 Dec 16
What a terrible hunter. I hope no kids is going to hear this story, poor Cupid and Comet.
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@shaggin (36666)
• United States
14 Dec 16
LOL that is true this one wouldn't be very good for kids.
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@JudyEv (121368)
• Bunbury, Australia
14 Dec 16
@LadyDuck @shaggin I did think about the impact on kids but I can't imagine any kids listening to this station so I think I'm safe. :)
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@shaggin (36666)
• United States
15 Dec 16
@JudyEv True some radio channels are just not meant for kids
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@xFiacre (4382)
• Ireland
14 Dec 16
@judyev I do hope It gets aired.
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@JudyEv (121368)
• Bunbury, Australia
14 Dec 16
The lady looking after the broadcast stories has been in our writing group for a few years now but she hasn't heard this one. Each of the past 7 years, we've put out an anthology of our poems and stories. It is a simple volume and we only print 100+ each time (I think).
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@stbrians (12681)
• Kakamega, Kenya
14 Dec 16
We should wish her well
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• Philippines
14 Dec 16
@JudyEv wow, you're a published author with a book every year!
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• United States
14 Dec 16
no one better shoot those deer or Christmas is off.
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@JudyEv (121368)
• Bunbury, Australia
14 Dec 16
Haha. I gave it to Vince to read (before he recorded it) and he got to the end and said 'That's awful'. But he still did it. :)
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• United States
14 Dec 16
@JudyEv I am going to count our deer today just to make sure they are all there !!!
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@JudyEv (121368)
• Bunbury, Australia
14 Dec 16
@AbbyGreenhill That's a good i-deer! :)
@Inlemay (16489)
• South Africa
14 Dec 16
great for the Radio Show - Such a BAD BAD hunter
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@JudyEv (121368)
• Bunbury, Australia
14 Dec 16
I very much doubt there'll be any kids listening so it shouldn't be too traumatic. :)
@stbrians (12681)
• Kakamega, Kenya
14 Dec 16
if he hunted for meat then one was enough. did he have a hunting permit? i do not approve of him
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@shaggin (36666)
• United States
14 Dec 16
Aww that would be so sad. I don't like hunting but my man is a very avid hunter. I listen to his stories to be supportive but sometimes I have to ask him to stop if it is particularly gory or vivid descriptions.
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@JudyEv (121368)
• Bunbury, Australia
14 Dec 16
I used to love what we called spot-lighting. We'd go out at night with a car and spot-light and shoot rabbits. But I grew out of it. :)
@shaggin (36666)
• United States
15 Dec 16
@JudyEv My man was talking about how people do that around here to deer and I think he said its called poaching. It is very illegal!
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@JudyEv (121368)
• Bunbury, Australia
15 Dec 16
@shaggin It was allowed here on your own property and you could often shoot on someone else's land if you had permission. We had a farm at the time.
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@hereandthere (29806)
• Philippines
14 Dec 16
i can understand vince's reaction. i never thought you had it in you! hahaha!
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@JudyEv (121368)
• Bunbury, Australia
14 Dec 16
The devil made me do it!
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• Philippines
15 Dec 16
@JudyEv even that sweet as candy has a hidden center.
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@JudyEv (121368)
• Bunbury, Australia
15 Dec 16
@hereandthere Everyone has to break out of the mould occasionally! Or else maybe I just have everyone fooled and this is more the 'real me'.
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@MarymargII (9622)
• Toronto, Ontario
16 Dec 16
Now that was a sad end to Christmas Cheer- at least he didn't shoot Santa! ha! Good but sad story!!!
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@JudyEv (121368)
• Bunbury, Australia
16 Dec 16
Santa lives to choose more reindeer dear! Oh dear!
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• Toronto, Ontario
17 Dec 16
@JudyEv Yes, he needs to replenish his pack now!
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@JudyEv (121368)
• Bunbury, Australia
17 Dec 16
@MarymargII I hope that hunter had enough grace not to hang out his stocking!!
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@jaboUK (53540)
• United Kingdom
15 Dec 16
Oh Judy, now you've spoilt Christmas for most of us!. ()
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@JudyEv (121368)
• Bunbury, Australia
15 Dec 16
As I said to Dianne - it's just a story. It didn't really happen.
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@jaboUK (53540)
• United Kingdom
15 Dec 16
@JudyEv Wot - you been tellin' porky pies??
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@JudyEv (121368)
• Bunbury, Australia
16 Dec 16
@jaboUK As I said to someone else - the devil made me do it! :)
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@velvet53 (16364)
• Palisade, Colorado
14 Jan 17
Santa should of made him take the place of Cupid or Comet or both.
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@JudyEv (121368)
• Bunbury, Australia
14 Jan 17
That's true. That woulda learnt 'im!!
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@velvet53 (16364)
• Palisade, Colorado
14 Jan 17
@JudyEv Yep it would of.
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@just4him (113414)
• Green Bay, Wisconsin
15 Dec 16
Oh that's too cute. Sad but cute.
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@JudyEv (121368)
• Bunbury, Australia
16 Dec 16
I like your new avatar. The story is a bit sad, isn't it?
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@just4him (113414)
• Green Bay, Wisconsin
16 Dec 16
@JudyEv Yes it is. Thank you. It's the picture I have on the back of my newest book.
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@Gillygirl (17277)
• Sutton, England
15 Dec 16
Poor, poor Cupid and Comet and a very naughty hunter
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@JudyEv (121368)
• Bunbury, Australia
16 Dec 16
That was the year Christmas was late! :)
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@Gillygirl (17277)
• Sutton, England
17 Dec 16
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@DianneN (76155)
• United States
15 Dec 16
I hope this gets chosen for your sake, but it made me ill! Poor Cupid. Poor Comet.
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@JudyEv (121368)
• Bunbury, Australia
15 Dec 16
It's just a story Dianne. There's not REALLY a Cupid or a Comet or even a Santa Claus.
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@DianneN (76155)
• United States
15 Dec 16
@JudyEv No kidding! Could have fooled me! Are you positive???
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• United States
15 Dec 16
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@JudyEv (121368)
• Bunbury, Australia
15 Dec 16
(Sometimes there is no need for words, is there?)
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• United States
15 Dec 16
@JudyEv no ma'am :(
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@nanette64 (17479)
• Fairfield, Texas
14 Dec 16
Oh crap!!! That's a big oops @JudyEv .
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@JudyEv (121368)
• Bunbury, Australia
14 Dec 16
I wonder what Santa did next? :)
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@nanette64 (17479)
• Fairfield, Texas
15 Dec 16
@JudyEv Hopefully he peed on the tree. lol
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@stbrians (12681)
• Kakamega, Kenya
14 Dec 16
It is surely imteresting. I hope it finds favor. They were seven. What was the role of santa?
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@JudyEv (121368)
• Bunbury, Australia
14 Dec 16
I'm not sure I understand. In the story, he needs to be there to let the hunter know it wasn't ordinary deer that he shot.
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@stbrians (12681)
• Kakamega, Kenya
14 Dec 16
@JudyEv Yes, it adds up fine
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@PatZAnthony (12573)
• Charlotte, North Carolina
16 Dec 16
That would be a terrible thing, wouldn't it?
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@JudyEv (121368)
• Bunbury, Australia
17 Dec 16
It would indeed. Luckily it's just a piece of fiction! :)
@suziecat7 (3399)
• Asheville, North Carolina
15 Dec 16
Oh no - what a story. Santa sounds mad.
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@JudyEv (121368)
• Bunbury, Australia
16 Dec 16
He'd just had two of his team annihilated! You'd be mad too!
@Jessicalynnt (47789)
• Centralia, Missouri
15 Dec 16
oh... my... bwahahahaa
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@JudyEv (121368)
• Bunbury, Australia
29 Dec
Sorry I missed this last year.
@MALUSE (39241)
• Germany
15 Dec 16
An interesting mix of German and English! So Father Christmas is a polyglot?! :-)
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@JudyEv (121368)
• Bunbury, Australia
15 Dec 16
I guess he must be. I hadn't thought about that aspect. :)
@Marty1 (32538)
• Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania
15 Dec 16
@judyev While normally I do not condone the killing of any animal this story is cute. Submit it is also very well written! How long did it take you to come up with the idea and write it?
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@JudyEv (121368)
• Bunbury, Australia
15 Dec 16
I can't remember now. We had to write a Christmas post - I think it was 2013. It is just a piece of nonsense. I don't like animals being killed either.