I can feel them (I wrote this on another site)

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I can feel them moving around me. The air barely changes, no sound permeates the silence. I can feel them though, as sure as I can feel my chest rise and fall. They are there, scurrying around me, as if I wasn't there. My lips curl in a smile at that thought. My eyes are still closed, I know there is no need to open them. I never see anything when I do. Just the blackness that surrounds me, only a dull light at the corners of my visage. I quiet my mind and listen. Not to any sounds, there still aren't any to be heard. I slip into a trance state, my mind focusing on the nothing that surrounds me. When I open my eyes, my surroundings have changed. Where there was once utter darkness, there is now light. The window to my left filters in sun through the drapes. The window has been opened, letting in a slight breeze. My skin feels clammy and hot. My lids feel heavy with the effort to keep them open. I am aware of the movements around me, but I can't focus on any one thing. I can hear humming though, a gentle sound meant to comfort me. Someone strokes my hair. I am aware of murmurings around me, softly spoken words that I'm not meant to hear. My eyes fall closed again, but I don't sleep. My body feels too enflamed for that. "It won't be long." I open my eyes to darkness again. My mind still playing over the last words I heard before I lost my focus. I move my limbs, they've grown stiff from lying in one place for too long. I stretch my arms above my head, turning to the side as I do. 3:30 A.M. I was away longer this time. The first few times I tried that, I was only able to focus for a few minutes before I lost my concentration. I hope I will eventually find out what happened here. The movements around me have stopped. I can't feel them anymore. I close my eyes and find sleep. I wrote this on reddit several months ago. I like it but I feel as if the end is a little jolting. Not quite.. it doesn't quite flow as well as the rest of the story. What do you guys think of it?