My son short story

@peachpurple (12772)
Malaysia
September 14, 2018 1:53pm CST
One day, At Five night at Freddy's Pizzeria, Toy Chica was siting at the stage sadly. Toy Bonnie saw Toy Chica there. He think Toy Chica was sad so he wanted to took something to her that can comfort her. Then he took a pizza and went to Toy Chica and said: "You hungry?" Toy Chica said:"No, thanks. I just ate." Then Toy Bonnie took a drink to Toy Chica again and said: "You thirsty?" Toy Chica said: "No, thanks. I am not thirsty." Toy Bonnie thought something again that can comfort Toy Chica. Suddenly, he thought an idea: "Plushies! They always work!" Then, he took a plushie to Toy Chica and said: Hey, Toy Chica, I have something for you." He show the plushie to Toy Chica. But she said:" Thanks, I already have one." Toy Bonnie threw the plushie and said:" I give up!" The plushie hit Golden Freddy. *Poor Golden Freddy.* Then Toy Bonnie went to look Bonnie for help. He said to Bonnie: " Bonnie, how do you get Chica to like you?" Bonnie said: " Does this something to do with you and Toy Chica?" Toy Bonnie didn't expected about this sentence, he said: "Noooooo!!!" Bonnie said: "Just tell her how do you feel." Toy Bonnie said: "I will make a fool of myself..." Bonnie said: "Don't worry, you can do it!" Toy Bonnie said: "Ok, I believe you..." Bonnie gave a thumbs up and said: "Good luck!" Then, Toy Bonnie waited a perfect moment and went to Toy Chica and said: Toy Chica, do you have a minute?" She said: "Yes." Toy Bonnie said: Toy Chica, We've knew each other many years, I've actually love you very much, I hate seeing you like just now sadly, will you be my girlfriend?" Toy Chica said: "I don't like you..." Toy Bonnie was very sad at that moment. But Toy Chica said:" I love you! And yes, I accept you." Toy Bonnie was on top of the world, Bonnie felt the same feeling with him too. Toy Bonnie and Toy Chica hugged each other happily, and Freddy and Chica saw that too. They were happy for them, including Bonnie. Since then, Toy Bonnie and Toy Chica are couples and were very happy. The End.
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@dodoazo (21612)
• Philippines
15 Sep
God story. It would be better if it is arranged in a paragraph for a break.
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@peachpurple (12772)
• Malaysia
15 Sep
Thanks. I will advise him on that. He is 11 years old. I can see he has grammar errors too
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@dodoazo (21612)
• Philippines
15 Sep
@peachpurple It is not the point. Grammatical errors would be corrected by others as long as he has the story to write. There are authors who are not writers.