Song spritual and biblical

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I've tried to write something, I believe I have many mistakes, if can let me know what are my erroes- I will be glad to know and I will add more notes below, it's important to read before replying. thanks. You talk about faith, but you are all gripped with nature Feel for the sorrow of the Divine spirit From your sorrow you're not moving even for a moment How will you sell them joy, when you are one of the saddest men in town How important is an open heart, you say, but your heart to another you will not betray. A vessel holding a blessing is the peace, but there is no peace in yourself Do turn the Torah a hatchet, a dagger and sword destroy your Torah Slight as severe, Tired, struggling His teachings are orderly, chametz in the rooms. How he is pacing gently, proudly Getting drunk, spinning around from the voices of the crowd They call him the righteous, Blessed is the righteous There will be anger in the bosom of the ignorant; the wrath of adders is your wrath An ignorant goes through his days doing nothing, you are immersed in your laziness How will you remember where you came from when you can not remember where you're going I'm a tiny mosquito from below, you say, well whatever But in your heart is the demon from the forest is in front of you How he paces between light and madness hopping delicately on the heads of the crowd They call him Tzadik, Blessed is the righteous Hi righteous man, rest, stop How long you be twisted, how long will you around in circles You know nothing will help you have to go through this pain No one is urging me anymore - why have you stopped My nights no longer come to claim their affront How can I escape from you, where would I make off A righteous man in his death is still alive, I am already dead in my life Be righteous man, between Days of Awe What would you tell yourself? What stories would you tell yourself? You know nothing will help Through this pain you have to go through Notes: 1.You talk about faith, but you are all gripped with nature (a man feels very connected to nature it became part of his soul) maybe embedded is better than gripped? the connection between the man and nature should be descrive as very strong connection. 2. Feel for the sorrow of the Divine spirit (When someone want to 'feel' the pain for somebody else, here the man feel 'pain' for the divine spirit 3. From your sorrow you're not moving even for a moment (the man always feel sorrow, and doesn't stop to feel sorrow even for one moment.) 5. "How important is an open heart", you say, but your heart to another you will not betray For "open" heart, it's something like to be very honest, but the line must use "heart" thanks. but your heart to another you will not betray- you will never let others know how you really feel. 1.A vessel holding a blessing is the peace, but there is no peace in yourself a vessel, imagine something very spritual, so there is a tool "holding" blessing of peace. Does choosing vessel is ok in order to describe something spirtual like this? but there is no peace in yourself or but there is no peace inside yourself? 2. Do not turn the Torah to be a hatchet, a dagger the the sword of your Torah Torah is the Jewish bible. It's more correct to write- Do not turn the torah into a hatchet? 3. Slight as severe, Tired, struggling If I want to write the opposite of severe, what is a more poetic word in English for that, instead of "easy"? Tired. is it more right to write- being tired? 4. Your teachings are orderly and clear, (but) chametz (bread) is in the rooms. Question. 1. I wonder if it's more correct to use "paces" (walking) ? Question. 1. Is it correct to write: and anger shall be in the bossom of an ignorant? 4. it's better writing "placing" than "putting"? it's in a 'biblical' language:) 7. make off- run away, is it ok to use "make off"? 4. Through this pain you have to go through - this is correctly to write it that way??