What do you think about this??

big red heart - Big red heart with a blue background
United States
February 4, 2007 10:58am CST
Ok one day i got a little bored and just starting writing and i ended up writing a lot of poems. I was wondering what everyone thinks about this poem that i wrote. This poem is a little sappy though. Ok i wrote this a few years ago and i can't spell so please forgive me for any spelling errors if there is any. Here it is: My heart flutter's at his name Mt stomic grows butterflies at his sight My eyes smile when he looks at me His voice makes me feel free My heart grows bigger and bigger when i look at him I melt at his touch I grow weak at his gaze He is the half that i am missing He makes me whole He makes me glow I live for him My equal, my love, my life
3 responses
@jbrooks0127 (2329)
• United States
4 Feb 07
One thing I have to say is never appoligise for anything about a poem you have written. No need to. It is a lovely poem. You do have a talant that needs to expand. I assume this was inspired by someone you know or knew? How could it not be right? Very good......
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• United States
4 Feb 07
yes this was inspried by someone that i knew. I knew him a long time ago and fell in love with him then. We tried the dating thing about 4 years ago but it didn't work out. I was good friends with him befor that and the dating thing ended it all. :-( I put a different one on here as well. You might like that one to. It was written for the same man. I've got a few sad ones that i might put on mylot to but i'm a little scared that someone might take the credit for them...
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@rumild (46)
• United States
10 Feb 07
jamie, your poem is great. makes me think of how i felt long ago ...
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@webeishere (36377)
• United States
27 Feb 07
I loved the poem. Back in the late 60's early 70's I wrote a lot of poetry & even had some published in Scholastic Scope I think was the name of the school magazine. It's been so long I forget. But I still have the copies around here & once I reach my 500th post I will see about posting a couple. Thanks for the opportunity to see your creative side shine. Happy posting here.