Exquisite

By Leca
@lecanis (16647)
Murfreesboro, Tennessee
April 1, 2008 8:57pm CST
Every word you say to me Is a knife Drawing a fine line Across my skin. Every time you look at me There’s a sword That twists somewhere Deep within my guts. You’re killing me with your presence But please don’t go. This death is the only one I want. Another random poem from me. I hope you like.
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6 responses
skinnychick
@skinnychick (6905)
• United States
2 Apr 08
Wow I love your darkness!! :) Another fine one, your "word play" is remarkable my talented friend!
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Leca
@lecanis (16647)
• Murfreesboro, Tennessee
4 Apr 08
I do believe you are the first person to tell me you love my darkness. I am deeply touched. Thank you!
skinnychick
@skinnychick (6905)
• United States
4 Apr 08
Your quite welcome! :)
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olivemai
@olivemai (4738)
• United States
2 Apr 08
Very good poem! I liked it. Pain is only skin deep, not worth throwing your love away because of it! So sincere. Maybe it is temporary?
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Leca
@lecanis (16647)
• Murfreesboro, Tennessee
4 Apr 08
Thank you. Pain is always temporary, one way or the other.
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olivemai
@olivemai (4738)
• United States
5 Apr 08
I guess so, like when we go to sleep, we should not be feeling pain!
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winterose
@winterose (39887)
• Canada
4 Apr 08
what a powerful poem, but I do not think that I want to trade places with you, I would not want anyone's words to affect me like that.
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Leca
@lecanis (16647)
• Murfreesboro, Tennessee
6 Apr 08
Thank you. I'm glad you found the poem moving. No... I suppose you wouldn't. I wouldn't either, looking at it from the outside.
ahgong
@ahgong (10064)
• Singapore
11 Jun 08
Wow... that is one dark poem you got there. Something that is really suitable to someone who just broke up or something like that. What inspired you to write such a poem?
Patsie Hatley
@Hatley (163781)
• Garden Grove, California
2 Apr 08
you have awesome talent and good luck you should be putting these in a book and seeing if you can get them published. i am also a writer unpublished however. keep it up; you have the talent so use it.
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Leca
@lecanis (16647)
• Murfreesboro, Tennessee
4 Apr 08
Thank you. I used to publish in magazines a lot, but it's been years since then. I'm going to self-publish a book soon just to sell to my friends online and such, but I don't know about having luck with real publishing companies. Good luck to you with your own writing!
queenofarms
@queenofarms (1659)
• United States
2 Apr 08
Thats very good Lecanis. I wish I could write poems.
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Leca
@lecanis (16647)
• Murfreesboro, Tennessee
4 Apr 08
Thank you! Anyone can write a poem if they try, I think. Though some people are more talented at it than others, like anything else. I'm sure you have talents too!