Contructive criticism wanted.

Hi SC! Hope all has been well with you. I had a look at the article. I felt that you didn't really answer the question. I could get the gist of what you were trying to say but I think perhaps you can find a clearer way to put it across. Maybe you could start along the lines of Barbie has been a part of little girls lives for over 50 years. In that time this blonde bombshell has causes a stir in more than just the toy shop. Thanks to the over political correctness of society Barbie has been accused of encouraging an unhealthy self imagine for children. I think also that it needs to be lengthed somewhat, which will not be to difficult as you make some great points which could easily be expanded upon. Anyway that is just my two cents worth, hope there is something of use in there but as always take it with a grain of salt. Let me know when you have a fresh version I would love to have a read.

Now I'm not a good writer by any means, but I will still like to be the first to reply to this discussion. I've taken a look at the article, and I found it quite well-written. Your points were clear, explicit and well explained. I have a suggestion though and that is you can include a description of a barbie doll at the introduction. If described well, it can even be a sort of "hook" for the reader to continue reading on. Also, you may add the point that one typical criticism of the Barbie doll is that she promotes an unrealistic idea of body image for women, given Barbie's height and vital statistics. This can possibly cause women who emulate Barbie to become anorexic. This is all I can think of at the tip of my fingertips, let me know if this helps.