Random Poetry Before Bed

@zweeb82 (5652)

Malaysia

October 14, 2016 12:10pm CST

The sound of the whirring fan As he gazes upon the moonlit night Before retiring to bed Thinking beyond the morning light Laying the head on the pillow The wondering mind recalling the billow Shall the wee hours bring forth rain Will the rain wash away the pain Is it really true the feeling of agony Or is it just really a cry of sympathy And so the soldier marches on No longer mindful whether it's dream or reality

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@Happy2BeMe (99353)

• Canada

14 Oct 16

Very nicely written and very touching!

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@zweeb82 (5652)

• Malaysia

14 Oct 16

Thank you very much. I always try to pen it down if not by the time I wake up I don't think I can remember a fraction of it....maybe no time to recall any of it due to the hectic life style

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@Ayuriny (5144)

• Denpasar, Indonesia

15 Oct 16

You wrote this poem? Well written.

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@zweeb82 (5652)

• Malaysia

15 Oct 16

Yup, I did. Thanks

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@jstory07 (148720)

• Roseburg, Oregon

15 Oct 16

i really liked reading your poem it was really neat.

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@zweeb82 (5652)

• Malaysia

16 Oct 16

Thanks. Maybe I should try random for the next one, lol!~

Let me try to figure out how that is first

@jaboUK (64346)

• United Kingdom

17 Oct 16

You've written a fine poem here, well done.

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@zweeb82 (5652)

• Malaysia

17 Oct 16

Thank you very much for the positive feedback. Appreciate it a lot

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@jaboUK (64346)

• United Kingdom

17 Oct 16

@zweeb82 You're welcome.

@RasmaSandra (97908)

• Daytona Beach, Florida

14 Oct 16

Loved this. You certainly have poetic talent. Looking forward to more from you.

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@zweeb82 (5652)

• Malaysia

14 Oct 16

Thanks a lot, appreciate it. I hope to hone it more less it becomes under utilized and rusty, lol!~

Will try to write more

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