The wishing well
By jamie11982
@jamie11982 (1658)
United States
April 30, 2007 7:45pm CST
I wrote this poem about 3 months ago looking to see what everyone thought about it but i got no responses. I am not even sure if anyone read it. I wrote it in my notebook about 4 or 5 years ago so i'm just looking to see what people think and how i could improve on it.
What do you think??????????
WISHING WELL
Here I sit being called
He calls me to come
I am a little traped
Theres no way to go and see
I can't make it to talk
I have to sit here while he calls
Calls me to leave
Calls me to walk
All that he wants is to talk
He wants me to go to the park
There we have met befor
That's were he wants me now
To go to the wishing well
But i have no way out
Besides the snow won't part
I can not stride to the park
In due time will i go
I will try to achieve his goal
I already know what the spirit wants
He wants to be found
He is a little boy who is lost
He's been lost for hundreds of years
He's called me to find him
His plain has flaws
No on would listen
No one would believe
No one would help
He'll be lost to all but me.
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2 responses
@anaknitatay (1335)
• Philippines
2 May 07
nice, mysterious, supernatural and romantic and sentimental at the same time. :)
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@jamie11982 (1658)
• United States
2 May 07
Thank you because this is just what i was trying to achive when i wrote it. I wanted it not only good but the spin tingling skin crawling type of good. Thank you for your comments.
@jamie11982 (1658)
• United States
1 May 07
No i don't have a blog. I do have a few other poems that i wrote in my other discussions. I hope that you'll enjoy those ones as well. Thank you for the prase. I thought that it was good but i didn't really know how good.
