Someone Else's Article a Must Read!
@LilyoftheThorns (12918)
United States
July 26, 2007 1:27am CST
I read this guys short stoy on Helium and I really enjoyed it! I thought it was written very smartly, and I liked it's synopsis! I would love to share this story with everyone and I hope you guys enjoyed it like I did.
http://www.helium.com/tm/393227/devils-voyage-pirate-henrietta
2 responses
@writersedge (22563)
• United States
26 Jul 07
I really liked it. He had me going, but my mind had this back in olden times. The helicopters at the end really ruined it for me. The Atlantis angle was a good one. Felt cheated when he left there. Wish he would have explored that more.
But you're right, up until it became anti-climatic for me, the style was great! So I enjoyed about 7/8 of the article.
What do other people think? I think a different ending and exploring Atlantis would have put the article up toward the top.
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@LilyoftheThorns (12918)
• United States
27 Jul 07
I think it would have been good if we saw more of Atlantis because it is such a mysterious place. But i like how the Bermuda Triangle took the ship from 'pirate days' to a fantasy land and then to today! I think it was a really cool plot and smarty written! :)
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@writersedge (22563)
• United States
27 Jul 07
So you're taking the fogs as transporting to different places in time? To me, Atlantis actually existed long ago. So to me, exploring Atlantis would have been the treasure, and I think the Ship's Captain might have agreed with that.
I took it as transporting from place to place in the same time period, then suddenly we weren't in the same time period. Also, the reaction to modern things, I felt would have been different if transported to now.
But the dialogue in the beginning is great! The descriptions of everything in the first two scenes are wonderful. I could see everything and I was really there. It really is a "must read" and I hope you get lots of responses.
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@LilyoftheThorns (12918)
• United States
28 Jul 07
Yeah, I took the fog as something that transported them to the same place but at different times, so whatever's going on is from a different time. That's probably why there is a helicopter and the coast gaurd at the end.
I agree, I really like his details and descriptions/details! He's very skilled.
