A poem - I want your thoughts.
By kangel48446
@kangel48446 (507)
United States
November 5, 2007 8:30pm CST
This is a poem that I wrote for my Grandpa and it was read at his funeral. It is published on poetry dot com already but I want your opinion.
Someone misses you
Someone misses your smile
the hugs and kisses you've shared
the warmth in your heart
the love in your eyes
the way you listened and cared.
Someone misses your laughter
reassuring, kind, and sincere
the touch of your hand
the sound of your voice
the comfort of knowing you're near.
Someone misses the magic
of the wonderful things you do
the secrets you hold
the dreams you reveal
the way you make wishes come true.
Someone wants for tomorrow
another day closer to when
the hoping has ended
the wishing is over
and someone holds you again!
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3 responses
@goodsign (2287)
• Malaysia
6 Nov 07
Thanks for providing that nice poem, where I can look deeply the "Moral Language" and easy to be synchronized with "Moral Tone" on reciting every written words.
My sincere comment is only for these two (2) lines;
the hoping has ended
the wishing is over
Much better if you can put up a "continuity" words to it. I really mean for; "has ended" and "is over"; as to ensure that your grandpa's hope and wish will be continued by his descendant generation. That was what I meant for "continuity" words.
the hoping .........
the wishing ........
I am sorry, Kangel. As I am not a poet laureate to give technical comments, but I love reading the power of poem words. The power of words exhibits the power of thoughts.
Have your nice day and Happy Posting!!!.
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@ersmommy1 (12588)
• United States
6 Nov 07
I read it twice. It's very beautiful. Most things that truly come from the heart are. I am sorry for your loss.
