A poem - I want your thoughts.
November 5, 2007 8:30pm CST
This is a poem that I wrote for my Grandpa and it was read at his funeral. It is published on poetry dot com already but I want your opinion. Someone misses you Someone misses your smile the hugs and kisses you've shared the warmth in your heart the love in your eyes the way you listened and cared. Someone misses your laughter reassuring, kind, and sincere the touch of your hand the sound of your voice the comfort of knowing you're near. Someone misses the magic of the wonderful things you do the secrets you hold the dreams you reveal the way you make wishes come true. Someone wants for tomorrow another day closer to when the hoping has ended the wishing is over and someone holds you again!
6 Nov 07
Thanks for providing that nice poem, where I can look deeply the "Moral Language" and easy to be synchronized with "Moral Tone" on reciting every written words. My sincere comment is only for these two (2) lines; the hoping has ended the wishing is over Much better if you can put up a "continuity" words to it. I really mean for; "has ended" and "is over"; as to ensure that your grandpa's hope and wish will be continued by his descendant generation. That was what I meant for "continuity" words. the hoping ......... the wishing ........ I am sorry, Kangel. As I am not a poet laureate to give technical comments, but I love reading the power of poem words. The power of words exhibits the power of thoughts. Have your nice day and Happy Posting!!!.