Patience by Erica H.

United States
November 17, 2007 12:13am CST
A gift from goddess The less I have The more you stray Further and further away So I shall stand With heart in hand Learn it apply it Keep it strong For you are everything Good especially today. Copyright ©199685origdate 1st edit=January 23, 2007 07:27 PM EST 2nd edit=February 23, 2007 12:46 PM EST
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Leca
@lecanis (16647)
• Murfreesboro, Tennessee
19 Nov 07
This reads aloud so beautifully! I always appreciate that in a poem... I read it once and then just had to repeat it so it could be heard. :) Thanks for sharing!
sojournseeker
@sojournseeker (1244)
• United States
21 Nov 07
Thank you for liking it so much. One question to change flow: Should I put a comma between good especially today or leave it as is ? Happy Thanksgiving to you . . .
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Leca
@lecanis (16647)
• Murfreesboro, Tennessee
21 Nov 07
You know, when I read it out loud, I think I create a comma there even though you didn't put one. So I think I like it better with one.
GnosticGoddess
@GnosticGoddess (5626)
• United States
17 Nov 07
Another good poem!!
sojournseeker
@sojournseeker (1244)
• United States
17 Nov 07
I anthropomorphized 'patience' by giving it a human characteristic that could be appreciated every time the strength is encouraged . . .
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dead_on_arrival
@dead_on_arrival (75)
• United States
29 Nov 07
In harnessing your power to accept this gift, your stubborness still prevails, gotta work on that sweetie !