Read my poem and give me your comments.....

@jpso138 (7860)
Philippines
February 20, 2008 5:03am CST
I wrote this poem when I was in college for someone very special. I would love to hear your comments... The Day I found you.... It takes a lot of words to let you know, The things that have happened the day I found you. I keep asking myself, what is this I feel? Is it true, is it not, or is this real? Believe it or not I've fallen for you. Your face, your smile, such a lovely view. Your voice so soft, I love to hear every night. Your presence, I seek to see in my sight. You are the princess the queen of my dreams! The cold clear water that runs in the streams. You've quenched my thirst that lingered long before. The reason why, I wanted of you more. I hope someday, somewhere, somehow, We can be together to take a vow. To live, love and share moments together, and cherish this things forever. As of now, all I can do is dream. Knowing there, I will never scream Hoping you will be there by my side. To hold my hands and be my guide. And don't ever forget that dreams do come true. It may take long, that we will never know. But I swear to you that all is true.... It all started the Day I Found you! But
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@care80 (10)
• United States
22 Feb 08
Associated content!!! Im soo glad to finally hear about a great poem posting sight that pays you money for the views because I posted a few of my poems on myspace before and my views were through the roof. So can you tell me how much you actually get paid for each view???? Someone please???
• Kenya
21 Feb 08
super poem,hits the nail on the head. excellent!
@jpso138 (7860)
• Philippines
21 Feb 08
I am happy to have receive your comment. Thanks for taking your time reading it.
21 Feb 08
Wow! All I can say is... You're a Great Poet. The person to whom you dedicate this poem must be in Cloud Nine!
@jpso138 (7860)
• Philippines
21 Feb 08
Well, I think that the poem must have put her on cloud nine since she said yes to me after reading the poem. Thanks for appreciating my poem.
• United States
20 Feb 08
What a lovely poem! Did you share it with your love? Did your relationship continue? Thank you for sharing those expressions of love. If I was that someone special, I would've felt very loved.
@jpso138 (7860)
• Philippines
21 Feb 08
I am glad you appreciate it Joyce. Yes, I did share it to her as my way of courting and she said yes to me. Well that was when we were students back then. Not so serious relationship but it was good. We are friends till now. I have also made a poem for my wife when we were still lovers but its to long to share it here. Well, she did really love the poem, I guess, every girl would appreciate a poem made for her as long as it comes from the heart.
• United States
20 Feb 08
Oh I love it! You really have a flair for writing. Maybe you should submit this one on Associated Content. They don't pay an upfront payment for poems but, you get paid for page views. I submitted a poem to them and it's doing pretty well.
@jpso138 (7860)
• Philippines
21 Feb 08
I'm glad you like it. I have heard about associated content but have not visited it yet. I will try to do so later on. I still have other old poems that I wrote before. Well, hopefully we could meet also there. Can you give me an idea how it is set up there? I could be your referred member if they have something to that effect. So just advise.
@shoumik12 (176)
• Bangladesh
20 Feb 08
It is a good poem. The words rhyme with the others. I'm wondering did you say the poem to that "someone very special" person in your college days. If you did what was her reply.
@jpso138 (7860)
• Philippines
20 Feb 08
I wrote it for a crush of mine as my way of courting her. Well she said yes to me. she became my girlfriend for 2 years. We ended up friends until now.