Getting Over
By azure29
@azure29 (30)
Philippines
March 13, 2008 8:15am CST
This is a poetry that I wrote for a friend of mine. Please tell me what you think of it. ;)
My feelings for you have gone,
Banished forever as if never born.
Never again shall they ever show,
Lest I risk destroying my soul.
1 response
@klaudyou (501)
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13 Mar 08
Well, words are quite well put there and the message is really precise, if I can say that...it goes bull's eye to the reader.
Now...it sounds almost like a curse...curageous attitude...
Maybe it could be developed more, like putting some lines about how "the feelings have gone"....
You show talent...hope to hear more!
