my latest poem for OlympicGames 2008
By xiaolongtion
@xiaolongtion (17)
May 4, 2008 4:17am CST
The torch of eternal eternal burning
Olympic rings flag flying
rRevival is silence
A dream, the desire
The resounding cry is the soul
Intense burning of life
The outbreak of this moment
Will display the full human potential
Faster and stronger higher
This moment of perfect
To fully embody the ideal fo mankind
Unity and friendship peace
At olympia hill
Over looks the aegean blue
The beijing 2008
Will be looking forward to a more beautiful
1 response
@danzer (2723)
• Philippines
4 May 08
I think your poem is not well organized and lack the ingredients of a good poem. I hope you can improve on your writing a poem so we could understand together. A poem that is not communicated properly does not mean anything to others except probably the writer. I hope you will not be offended by this answer!
