looking for feedback, what do you think? any ideas on a title?

July 2, 2008 11:18pm CST
Standing On the cliff The edge of My life Chance is the Air I breath Happiness My parachute The drop is Reality Fragility Of the human wings Never Meant to fly Clipped, tamed Even broken Yet Still I soar On air With happiness And here I am Standing. copywrited. 2008
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@klaudyou (501)
3 Jul 08
Your poem is like a dictionary of symbols... You made it easy for the reader... Good or bad....you choose! the title: Reveal
• Canada
4 Jul 08
thank you so much!! the ultimate goal of all my work is to be painless for the reader. No matter who you are or what you've been through, i like to think anyone can relate to or even just "get" my writing. your idea for the title actually gave me a new insight on the poem itself. Great suggestion!!!
@Hatley (164180)
• Garden Grove, California
3 Jul 08
littlepunk nice poem, Happiness my Parachute would be a' great title or On Human Wings may be a better choice, anyway those are my choices for titles. I like your poem very' much. another title might be Still I Soar.
• Canada
4 Jul 08
thank you so much for your comments and suggestions. im new to mylot and really am hoping to use it as an outlet for some my mental ramblings ha ha.
@nanayangel (7881)
• Philippines
22 Aug 08
Hi there Little Punk! That is a great poem. Thank you very much for sharing it to us.