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I wrote something for my father and I published it at poetry.com. I am trying to get feedbacks from mylotters.Here goes. Along The River Of Time. Rowing in the boat of time Going along the river of memories Watching the sky of pain and laughter Changing colors From pure white To dark black At last came Calming blue At the end of this river Lie down and rest O father Close your eyes in deep slumber Let the laughter of your children fill the air May your rest be a peaceful one Unforgettable.... Serene.... Long deep slumber ...... An honest response would be nice. I want my poem to be presentable. Thank you.