A love song I wrote for my love - FOREVER
By HelScream
@HelScream (2822)
Philippines
July 5, 2009 8:49am CST
OK. Here i have wrote a love song for my gf. And it's unfinished. I just want to know other mylotter's opinion about the song. That if it is considered as a song.
OK. So here is the song:
A promise we have made
To be together, for being forever
A dream we have set
To be together, for being forever
Baby i love you, i love you
Let us go together, holding each other
Forever and ever and ever.
I am giving my hand, to you and only you
Hold it and be mine
Forever and ever and ever.
Holding your hand on my hand
I can live my life, with you & only you
Forever and ever and ever.
Let us go together, forever
Baby let's go, together, forever
As i said it is unfinished. So please let me know your opinion about it.
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4 responses
@mylesnarvaez (5451)
• Philippines
5 Jul 09
well... it looks like a lyrics to a love song... kindly add some beat, tempo, tune and music and let me hear you sing it and i'll tell you if it's a love song. hehe just kidding. 
i've always thought that if a love song has no music yet, it's still a love poem for me. i guess, i got used to hearing music in a song. hehe
it is definitely the workings of a love song. it's quite nice to be inspired to do one. lucky girl. hehe keep the words flowing... add the reason why it's forever.
i've always thought that if a love song has no music yet, it's still a love poem for me. i guess, i got used to hearing music in a song. hehe
it is definitely the workings of a love song. it's quite nice to be inspired to do one. lucky girl. hehe keep the words flowing... add the reason why it's forever.
@mylesnarvaez (5451)
• Philippines
6 Jul 09
get more sleep and don't skip meals... your stomach is reaching out to you and complaining already... hehehe
when you get the beat of the song, a mellow/slow tune or pop or whatever... words will easily flow. do you play guitar or any instrument? it helps...
goodluck on "forever"... both the song and you know what else i mean. hehe
@HelScream (2822)
• Philippines
5 Jul 09
well I think it lucks more myles can you help me out lol
just kidding well it was just made in a rush and want to
know what else to add on this one..... nah I am lucky to have her 
no dramas lol ok hope you are ok now .... I cant sleep yet...
no dramas lol ok hope you are ok now .... I cant sleep yet...
@ANTIQUELADY (36440)
• United States
5 Jul 09
It sounds pretty to me & shows u feel alot for this girl. Hope u deserves u. Good luck.
@HelScream (2822)
• Philippines
5 Jul 09
thank you my lady actually this was made in a hurry and just want to finish it in a few minutes but looks to me it lucks more... thanks again
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@ANTIQUELADY (36440)
• United States
5 Jul 09
I bet she'll love it. If someone wrote a song for me i would love it.
@definitelyarun (210)
• India
5 Jul 09
It is a good one. I think it needs more romance in it. I know it's unfinished. Try to get more romantic words into it. You have a lot of 'holding' and 'together' in your song. Try being more poetic(not about rhyming)
Like..
No tide or storm can erase ,
The feel of your embrace.
When I see your smiling face,
The beauty and the solemn grace,
I wish there'd be a million lives,
So I can love you all the time.
Every word I sing today,
Is for you to stay this way,
With me,Forever and ever.
Have you composed a tune?Do well!
@Bloggership (1104)
• Indonesia
9 Jul 09
I see that's a really romantic lyrics HelScream... Wow... I never thoughts that you have a talent to express your feelings into a song... Well finished then, and sing it just before your girl in a clear night...
