Writing Poetry / myLot

United States

December 14, 2010 2:10am CST

I am a writer, I write novels and short stories mostly. I am not really one to write poetry except when I am relly down so I usually end up sounding really morbid. I would like to expand my koledge of the subject because I really want to be a good writer someday. This is a poem I wrote recently: Its not really named but I call it: I Feel I feel so stupid sometimes, So many mistakes I've made. I feel like such a fool, So many wishes I've made. I feel so much regret, So many things I've done. I feel so ashamed, So many people I've hurt. I feel I should move on in life, So much lies before me. I feel like leaving it all behind, So many times I've tried. I feel like you would be better off without me, So much trouble I am. I feel that your happiness comes first, So I leave it up to you.... Tell me what you think of it and how I might improve.

4 responses

didi13

@didi13 (2926)

• Romania

4 Aug 11

I like. Always a poet has his own demons and angels that make writing the way he does. A poet is perhaps the only man so near perfection that allows her to express it in words and weigh in published volumes. I think you are a sensitive man, a very imaginative man, with a great creative energy of a world parallel to the tangent or outside. Therefore, you can disassociate the joys and pain around you, creating your own kind of fortress, from which you seek out food when inspiration. You can see the pain behind a smile and joy that follows pain. So, A poet is never cursed more than he wants, meaning it is He who decides one destiny. Good luck!

Oneironaut

@_sketch_ (5742)

• United States

4 Jan 11

The thing about poetry is that you don't always have to write complete sentences. Like honestly, I would take out a few words something like this: So stupid sometimes So many mistakes made Such a fool So many wishes So much regret Oh the things I've done So ashamed So many people hurt Should move on in life So much lies before me Feel like leaving it all behind So many times I've tried Better off without me So much trouble I am Your happiness comes first I leave it up to you See something more like that. I think it's best to try to limit the amount of times you use the word I. Even if you did take out the word feel or just use it once as I had written above, you can still title it feel. Anyways, this is just a suggestion, poetry has no rules.

@gambama (90)

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14 Dec 10

For me what makes good poetry is strong images. That is what is missing. You are telling instead of feeling. i'll give you an example; "When dreams die Life is a broken winged bird That cannot fly" --- Dreams by Langston Hughes. Do you see what I mean?

ThoughtfulNightOwl

@ThoughtfulNightOwl (52)

• United States

14 Dec 10

I don't know how or what it is for most, but for me its a flowing of emotions. I've had my poetry published twice and both were pieces that simply flowed from my emotions. You can channel any emotion. However I've personally never been able to force it. If you One starts to come to mind, write that little guy down before it slips away! I can't tell you how many poems have come to mind and I've thought 'oh well I'll write that down later' only to forget it later. Good luck to you!