Poem from my blog : Contemplation

United States
November 21, 2012 10:30am CST
Contemplation Early are the cries that come whispering to me Rousing me from sleep and speaking mystically Deep are the echoes that sound through the night Inviting me beyond my own inner light. Unspoken are the words and mystical the ways In which I'm touched by these transforming rays Unable to move about and barely able to see I remain transfixed inside this mystery So sweet is the music from the universe outside Touching my fragile mind and my being deep inside I'm lost to that realm which is measured by our time So I dwell within a space that gives birth to all my rhyme (c) joy aka littlefranciscan
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@mariaperalta (19073)
• Mexico
21 Nov 12
LOve it. thanks so much for sharing here with us Id love to see more form you here.
• United States
21 Nov 12
seems that someone is offended that i posted my poems.here.. I am not getting any money for sharing them. I don't know if I can keep posting them.. I have not put my blog link.seems some folks are a bit jealous..
@urbandekay (18278)
21 Nov 12
I quite liked this but I hope you don't mind me suggesting you shorten the last line of each stanza, it would in my opinion, improve the rhythmic flow. For instance you might consider omitting the words 'my own' from the first stanza all the best, urban