Email letter correction. Sentence and grammar.pl share

Honestly, I didn't understand anything in that email. You want a list of rejected candidates, right? And the manager wants you to send other, trained candidates? If that's the case, consider rewriting your request so that it addresses HIS needs, not yours. For example: "Thank you for taking the time to discuss the candidates we have sent for interview. I would be grateful if you could send a list of those you rejected. This information will help me understand your requirements and ensure that only appropriately trained individuals are sent for interview in future." Or something. It's always good to talk about how something will help THEM, so they do it.

"Further to our conversation [of *date*], please would you provide us with the list of rejected candidates. [This would help us to recruit more candidates in the near future.]" - Please see my note below - "We would like to assure you that we make every effort to continue to send suitable candidates to your company." - "As per" is 'jargon' and bad English. - When referring to a previous conversation, it is helpful to give the date. Many people are very busy and it is helpful to specify the particular conversation referred to. - "I request you to" is considered peremptory and is far too formal, therefore also 'jargon'. "Please would you ..." is more polite and direct. - "The rejected candidates' list" means 'the list made by or belonging to the rejected candidates'. What you want is the 'list of rejected candidates'. - Because you have already discussed the matter with this person, he, presumably already knows why you want the list of rejected candidates and how it will be of benefit to both parties, therefore "... to meet our needs." and "I am sure ... both ends." are quite unnecessary. I am not convinced that even the sentence: "This would help us to recruit more candidates in the near future." is needed. I don't see how the list will help you recruit more candidates. All it can do, I would imagine, would be to help you select candidates who are more suitable for his needs. - The final sentence is a "wrap up" line. Many business communications end this way (often with a 'boiler plate' stock phrase which means little or nothing!). It usually assures the person of continued good service in some way and the real purpose is to leave the recipient with a 'warm feeling' about your organisation.