my speech under food theme (sorry for a lot of mistake, please comment)

@jeniar (37)
Bandung, Indonesia
November 7, 2013 3:58am CST
This speech example is mine. I made it when I'm at 12th grade of senior high school for my final task of my speech class. Hope u guys enjoyed it :) THE DIFFERENCE BETWEEN INDONESIA AND AUSTRALIA FOOD PORTION Good afternoon sir, thank you for the oppurtunity that given to me to deliver my speech about “The difference between Indonesia and Australia food portion”. But before that, let me thank to God because of his blessings we all can gather here today. Audients, today I have a funy fact about Indonesia food portion. Base on a survey that already done by students from health faculty in Indonesia University on 2011, if we want to compare with Australia, Indonesia citizen eat so much food in a day. They eat a big portion of, rice, noodles,chicken, meat, fisk, pork, and also vegetables in a day, but in australia, people usually just eat cereal for breakfast, hamburger for lunch, and maybe some salad in night, or any smal portion of food. And what make it funny is, eventought we eat a lot of food, we still look small, short, dont have energy, and our thinking ability is still low. Otherway, australian citizen look more healty, their body is good with all their muscle, they look fresh, tall, have a bright skin, with flush cheeks (bright pink), at least they look more passion for life. Same with this fact, my teacher who get postgraduate scholarship in Australia, ever make a joke and say like this to me “in Indonesia, we eat a lot of food everyday, like a mountain of rice but how small we are. In Australia they just eat a little piece of bread and milk, but their body look like Ade Ray”. Yes, so thats some proof that we definetely have a different food portion with Australia. First, for me, if we eat a lot of food, it doesn’t matter, no rule that prohibit it. But we should check the nutrition so it isn’t useless. People in Indonesia usually just eat because they are hungry so just eat up everything. A mountain of rice in the morning, and the same in afternoon and evening. We dont have enough knowledge about a balance food, and dont really care about it. And the second, economic problem that Indonesia people have is also the causes. Dont ask for a balance, healthy, and nutrition food, just to get some rice to survive, it feels like really hard. So, audients, now we come in tho the conclusion of this speech. For me, I’m not blaming that Indonesia people is all wrong. The heredity and ancestors racial factor and also the culture and perseption that we have about food is extremely hard to change especially in this kind of our country condition. Maybe just some rich people can have a healthy portion of food. And the other? Dont ask, they will still eat everything like usual. But, out of that, for people that already know that balance portion isn’t always a big portion, may be should pay more attention for that so other people can she the benefit. Because healty is really important. All of your life plans is useless if you're sick.So thats all about my speech, thank you and God bless you.
2 responses
• Hangzhou, China
10 Nov 13
Indonesia is more like china ,Rice is our major food,but being short and small has nothing to do with eating rice or having a balance food,if you have a Australia children grow up in Indonesia eating Rice everyday,he will still become taller and stronger then most asian,it;s the DNA difference
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@jeniar (37)
• Bandung, Indonesia
11 Nov 13
Yes, Its true that genetic or DNA factor is the major thing. But what I mean is at least we can optimize our growth by having balance food nutrition.
@jeniar (37)
• Bandung, Indonesia
11 Nov 13
@jeniar I'm not agree with you. You should know that nutrition is so important for body growth and that nutrition are contain in Balance Food. If someone don't have balance food, then of course that person don't afford enough nutrition for his body and it will make the tissues of the body lost substance that it needs and the growth will inhibited!
• Hangzhou, China
11 Nov 13
@jeniar i totally agree with balance diet and necessary nutrition ,but these two things can't make asian grow up more stronger and taller then european,right?
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• Davanagere, India
7 Nov 13
Hi dear jeniar. Bravo on such a good concept. You have a keen common sense. For a teenager, writing on a complex issue is very hard. You reached out load and clear. You really made sense. And hey, try to use ms-word while writing projects as it will train you where you are making spelling mistakes. You did a really neat job. The flow was good. Just work on things like - when you use people, try using 'are', and some helping verbs. Nothing major. For a teenager, you are doing a great job. Even I make mistakes and so does all. To err is human :-)
@jeniar (37)
• Bandung, Indonesia
7 Nov 13
Thank you for ur correction, really glad to have a friends like u :) yes, i do a lot of mistake in this speech, there are a lot of things to learn but I'm lucky to have u as my friend that always give me correction. thanks again, I really appreciate it
• Davanagere, India
7 Nov 13
@jeniar Hey, don't thank me jen. We are here to learn and better ourselves. It is a nice way to improvise. You reached out the right way. I never knew you existed till today. I am happy to have a you as a pal too :-) Just use ms-word while writing. We only use 30-40% of grammar. But we do use a lot of 'make sense intuition words' as a building blocks for sentence construction. I am happy to help you :-)
@jeniar (37)
• Bandung, Indonesia
7 Nov 13
@Mithun_86 lol, okay, nice advise guys :) happy to have you as part of my learning process :)