Christmas Story Response
By AmberLynn
@ScribbledAdNauseum (104615)
United States
December 17, 2018 10:26am CST
The little girl quietly eased out of her bed and tiptoed to her bedroom door. She gently opened the door, being mindful of the squeak it made if opened too far. She peered out of the room, and seeing that the coast was clear, quickly made her way down the hall and into the den where the Christmas tree stood. Her favorite day of the year had finally arrived. She padded over to the tree and began to furtively shake the presents. Her father stood off to the side, out of sight, a bemused expression on his face.
Does 98 words count? I couldn't think of a way to squeeze two more words in. I am sure there are probably five different ways to do it, I just can't see them.
@indexer started this challenge when he offered his own story and suggested we do the same.
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3 responses
@ScribbledAdNauseum (104615)
• United States
17 Dec 18
Thank You.
This was not an easy story to pull out of thin air.
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@ScribbledAdNauseum (104615)
• United States
18 Dec 18
Thank You. Those words mean so much to me.
I was actually tempted to write about a dream I used to have. The dream is of me in my bedroom waiting for Christmas Day. In the dream I wake up and go outside and the houses all resemble ones you might see in San Francisco, close together and down a sloping hill. I'm worried because I had just moved and I wasn't sure if Santa could find me, even though I also knew that Santa wasn't real.
I think the dream started shortly after I had moved to a new place, and obviously around the time I was beginning to suspect there was no santa.
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@ScribbledAdNauseum (104615)
• United States
18 Dec 18
@Courage7 I couldn't have made that story into one hundred words or I would have.
I am thinking I should start sharing my stories here again. I stopped writing completely when I stopped writing here. I don't want to do that anymore, so I need to start writing here again.
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@Courage7 (19626)
• United States
18 Dec 18
@ScribbledAdNauseum That would have been an awesome story too.
Welcome always thank you for sharing with us
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@indexer (4852)
• Leicester, England
17 Dec 18
That's good. You can get two extra words in quite easily - how about changing "if opened too far" to "if she opened it too far"?
@ScribbledAdNauseum (104615)
• United States
17 Dec 18
That's not a bad idea but I was being mindful of overusing the word "she".
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