The Nanny---Gotcha!!

@gr8nana6 (6614)
Conyers, Georgia
August 14, 2020 4:08pm CST
You can find the second installment below: Having ended up on the 14th floor, Ben and Becky are on a mission to find out who Deanna had an affair with, so they can figure out who might have murdered her. After knocking on several doors with no results, they see a door down the hall open and Claire Manning comes out with her daughter. Claire is the employer of Rose ( another nanny and a friend of Deanna's). They ask her about when she last seen Deanna and as they talk to her, Claire's husband Richard emerges from the bedroom. They ask him if he had seen Deanna lately and he tells them that he can't remember. Noticing his odd behavior makes them suspicious of him and thinking he might be the other man, Ben stands behind Becky and he dials Deanna's number. As they hear the faint ringing of a phone, Claire follows the sound into their bedroom and finds a cell phone under the bed. She asks her husband " who's phone is this" and he doesn't answer, but Becky and Ben now know that it was him that had the affair with Deanna. They take him into custody and question him extensively, but Richard denies everything except the affair. After he asks for a lawyer they stop the questioning, arrest him and put him into a holding cell.
You can find the first installment below: After finding out from Deanna's boyfriend about the alleged affair, Becky and Ben go to the playground to talk to...
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• United States
14 Aug 20
Another nice installment. I know that you are writing this for fun, and aren't really worried about the structure.. Forgive me if I am overstepping, but.. They ask him if he had seen Deanna lately and he tells them that he can't remember. Noticing his odd behavior makes them suspicious of him and thinking he might be the other man, Ben stands behind Becky and he dials Deanna's number. They ask him when the last time he'd seen Deanna was, and he insists that he can't remember. His vehemence makes them suspicious of him. Ben stands behind Becky and dials Deanna's number, listening for the ringtone he already expects he will hear. Again, don't mind me, I don't mean to come off as insulting.
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@gr8nana6 (6614)
• Conyers, Georgia
14 Aug 20
Oh noooo don't worry about it, I appreciate your input. Too late to change it now though, thank you
• United States
14 Aug 20
@gr8nana6 Your welcome. I've been trying to do more show and less tell in my own writing lately, so I've been doing some research on writing.
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@gr8nana6 (6614)
• Conyers, Georgia
14 Aug 20
@ScribbledAdNauseum I know I need all the help I can get
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@LindaOHio (159561)
• United States
15 Aug 20
Curiouser and curiouser. Thank you for another great installment. Have a great weekend.
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@gr8nana6 (6614)
• Conyers, Georgia
15 Aug 20
Thank you, the last one is out now. Have a great weekend.
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@gr8nana6 (6614)
• Conyers, Georgia
15 Aug 20
@LindaOHio Your welcome.
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@LindaOHio (159561)
• United States
15 Aug 20
@gr8nana6 Thanks!
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@snowy22315 (171664)
• United States
14 Aug 20
The suspense is killing me..
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@gr8nana6 (6614)
• Conyers, Georgia
14 Aug 20
Only 1 more, thank you for reading.
@just4him (309433)
• Green Bay, Wisconsin
15 Aug 20
Very good!!!
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@gr8nana6 (6614)
• Conyers, Georgia
15 Aug 20
Thank you so much.
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@just4him (309433)
• Green Bay, Wisconsin
15 Aug 20
@gr8nana6 You're welcome.
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@CarolDM (203449)
• Nashville, Tennessee
14 Aug 20
You have a nice series posted. Good job.
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@gr8nana6 (6614)
• Conyers, Georgia
14 Aug 20
Thank you, I appreciate it.
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