Need your help!

I write a song.. - This is what I want to share with you all. It's a short composition for someone special in my life right now. I know this still needs to be polished but it's already the best for me. Hope you'll somehow like it.
@020788 (78)
March 17, 2007 2:14am CST
I have this composition but it's not that nice. It's just a spontaneous creation out from an imaginative mind. How can you help me? I have already the stanzas for this poem which I am planning to make as a song, but still doesn't have the title. Can you give me suggestions on what title could fit my compo? Thanks. Here it goes: I write this song to tell you that I'm so thankful to have you. You brought back the trust that was once lost in me since I came from shattered commitments that consumed all my egoistic property. Remember the time that I told you that I will be trying my best to love you. Just give me time to learn how to do it and I promis that it won't take any longer. I really thought that we will have a hard time together. It was of my expectation that I would never learn to love coz' I thought I am still imprisoned with my selfish emotion. Now I realize that I am totally wrong for I already surrendered my heart to you before my awaited due. So boy since you now have me. Please don't let me down in all what I hoped for. You confined the total me and I assume that I conquered the entire you. What do you think? Too bad??
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• Philippines
17 Mar 07
Nice.. but maybe you can add some poetry in it..