This is a preview to the book that I am writing please coment on it if you can .

@kevy38 (11)
United States
October 31, 2006 10:53pm CST
I started writing this on Setember 13th, 2006:I wa born in Baltimore Maryland on October 4th, 1968 in Baltimore Marlyand. My birthparents are Dennis and Sandra. I have an older brother Darrin who is 3 years older than myself and lives in Kirkland Wahington. I was legally married on August 6th 2005 here in Boston Massachusetts to my husband Anthony who is 40 years old. When I married Anthony he told me He had full blown AIDS and wears a colosophy bag because in 1995 he boughted with cancer and it started in his rectem and He had to make a choice either forgo the surgery or get the surgery done.. When I married Anthony he insisted that I get my Hepatitius Shots A, B, & C and I have come clear free of those also I am HIV- and He makes sure I stay that way including myself. After I was 2 months old I moved from Baltimore Marlyand and lived in Marlboro Mass and attendant readiness school twice. then went on to Kindegarten and ist grade. My mom wanted to be closer to the beach so our family bought a house located in Newburyport Mass. In Newburyport I was in Grades 2nd until 7th. Then our family moved from Newburyport to Byfield Mass and Went to Triton Regioanl High School and was activelly involved witht the Drama Program and Music Program from the time time I went in 1983-1987. Throughout my schholing I was placed in special ed classes because of my learning disabilty in English and Math. My Father and Mother divorced each other after that awful blizzard we had here in New England in 1978. My Dad and Mom remained good friends since the divorced my Mother never remmaried but, my father did 3 times its a long story
3 responses
@DREA8685 (31)
• United States
31 Dec 06
I also live in newburyport mass..cant wait for your book to come out..sounds good
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@kevy38 (11)
• United States
31 Dec 06
if you want to email me please do at kevinh37@comcast.net
@kevy38 (11)
• United States
1 Jan 07
Thanks for the Lovely Comment I am still working on my book and if you would like to preview a little more check out myspace.com/kevy37. Happy New Year 20007
• United States
16 Nov 06
KEVY, I think you may want to consider taking a writing course and that might help you learn how to write in a style that will grab people's attention a little better. It's unclear why you would marry someone who has "full blown AIDS"...most readers would wonder about that and you say it as if it's almost a common thing. Your spelling, punctuation and grammar need some work but there are writers, like James Mitchner that are supposed to be pretty bad at those things and still crank out plenty of popular books. He's had good editors, I'm sure. If you're 38 yrs. old and haven't had anything published before, you might want to start with a short story or article and see if you can get that published anywhere. Starting with a book if you've never been published is like running before you walk. But good luck whatever you decide to do. suetiggers
@kevy38 (11)
• United States
31 Dec 06
I think this my poinion ans whoever doesnt agree with this can fly the coop oh well
@kevy38 (11)
• United States
1 Jan 07
This book of mine is only in the prelimainary stages right now and I keep changing it all the time my style of writing as a my writing peofessor says that free styling is the best way to write. and that is what I am doing. Please if you have any critsim I will take it if you have any suggestion then please feel free and let me know. I could appreaciate the feedback. Thanks
@misskatonic (3723)
• United States
31 Dec 06
I'm giving you honest feedback as a professional writer: Your style is very dry. You're not telling a story, you're narrating a documentary. A bad documentary. It's one big info-dump. There's absolutely nothing gripping or interesting in this whatsoever. There's no story. There's no depth. It's rambling and disjointed and stilted. The timeline seems to make very little sense as well. The grammar, spelling and punctuation need a lot of work as well. You really should take a writing course to hammer out some sort of style, because so far you've got nothing. Good luck!
@kevy38 (11)
• United States
1 Jan 07
Okay point taken I probably should enroll in a writing course my style may be different than yours I am new to this and if you check out my profile on myspace.com/kevy37 maybe you will get a little more info. and Please I welcome the comments and if you have suggestions keep them comming....