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I am starting to use solo ads to promote my business. Although my business does give extensive training in marketing, one of the things it doesn't have is pre-written solo ads. So last night I wrote one myself and I am going to put it out there later today. I want to get some feedback on how it looks before I do send it out though. I don't want to waste the time or the credits if I don't get a good response. The program is big on not having hype, so the main thing that I am looking for is that my ad doesn't seem hyped up or unbelievable. Here is what I have ==================================================================================== Can anyone Really Make Mo:ney Online? I am here to tell you yes you can make a substantial earning online, and it doesn't take mon:ey to do so. Contrary to popular belief, you can build a substantial income online without sending a large sum of money to get started. Most of the information you have been exposed to was created to just take your money and leave you scratching you head trying to figure out WHAT DO I DO NOW? We are here to save you from that. Welcome to the ***Name edited so this post will not be deleted***. Let the lazy "opportunity seekers wast hundreds and thousands of dollars on the $100, $297, $597, $997 and up programs that promise to world and deliver nothing. Here we offer you: -A business model that requires NO OUT OF POCKET COST but makes you $100s, then $1000s online immediately -A super-charged, proven marketing system that is also FREE OF CHARGE (we leave nothing to chance) -Ongoing training and support to ensure your success (you are never alone) -And, you will learn the techniques to pull all of the steps together to put your earning power on autopilot. Who else has offered you such an opportunity? Anyone can make a living online... but you need a proven plan or system. Don't let this one pass you by. ================================================================================== So what do you think? Did I hype the opportunity up any? Would this grab your attention if you saw it in your e-mail? Would you be tempted to at least go to the site? Or did I make it seem too good to be true. Please let me know MyLot, I have until 4pm EST to make changes, because that is the time that this goes out.