Opinions on my short story?

China
October 30, 2008 12:21am CST
I know it may look long, but its only 1 paragraphs. Anyway,could you guys just read it quickly and tell me if you liked it, hated it. or whatever else. I am also deciding on a title, any ideas please and thankyou. The chain attached to my leg allowed me no more than two arms length of movement. It was the imperative link which forever locked my soul,. only allowing me to forget human emotions such as desire. When I tried to break it, the chain would rattle. when I tugged at it. the chain would rattle, and when I reached out for someone's hand. the chain would only rattle, as there was no there to hold it. This had been my only reality, until the man covered in a hood crossed in a hood crossed paths with me.
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@NonaSaile (926)
• Philippines
30 Oct 08
You may need some proofreading work. Looks kind of good to me, but it's too short for me to make any more evaluation. Good luck! Stay inspired!