would someone critique my hip hop lyrics?

United States
June 20, 2009 5:23pm CST
Here are links to two of my verses, and just so you know there not gangter hip hop, just about life and problems....sorry there links, didnt feel like typing or pasting them www.authspot.com/Rap/A-Short-Verse-hip-Hop.791879 www.authspot.com/Rap/Short-Verse-2.791749 by the way these might be considered a little unsuitable for younger kids do to drug refrances....
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