Cancer

@flapiz (4160)
Australia
October 7, 2012 10:48pm CST
If you give me another smile, I swear I'd drop dead, For baby it is lethal , It will kill me when it's gone. If you look at me with those happy eyes, I know I'd break down. You act as if everything is alright, But we both know everything is wrong. I hate everything you do. It makes me love you more each day. You're making it harder for me to bear, When He says it's time for you to go. If only we could switch places, I wouldn't feel this way, For I guess leaving is easier, Than being left behind. If only I could look at you forever, If only you could stay, My world is filled with wishes, Wishes that I know won't come true. AN: This is a poem I wrote when I was in highschool. Inspired by my chemical Romance's song "Cancer". Well I know it's not that good. But I hope you enjoy it. Constructive criticisms are welcome.
3 responses
@adnileb (5017)
• Philippines
8 Oct 12
It's cute! When I was in college, I used to make poems too. Now, I can't seem to make even the shortest. Before, I get to see lots of things and situations that makes me inspired doing them. Like for some, the ask me to make them a poem about their crush or loved one. It's so flattering sometimes. Keep it up!
@flapiz (4160)
• Australia
8 Oct 12
I used to write love poems too. It's like the best topic to write about. It is indeed flattering when people appreciate your pen work. Maybe you should try writing again when you have time. I want to read your work.
@adnileb (5017)
• Philippines
8 Oct 12
Maybe I will let you read my past poems. But that is if I find my small notebook. I wish it's just here somewhere. When I find it, I'll just comment back the poem here. Can't make another discussion for it, I'll give it all to you. Just wait for it, okay?
@flapiz (4160)
• Australia
8 Oct 12
Hi! Really? I'm excited. Why can't you make a new discussion for it?
• India
8 Oct 12
Awesome writing. I can feel the pain and anger in words. I would love to read more from you.. :)
@flapiz (4160)
• Australia
8 Oct 12
Thanks. I guess you're writing is better though.
@jambi462 (4599)
• United States
8 Oct 12
I think they are pretty lyrics and thoughts if you ask me. I love to get inspiration from my favorite artists as well when it comes to writing poetry or music.
@flapiz (4160)
• Australia
8 Oct 12
Hi Jambi! Thanks for the compliments. It is indeed nice to find inspiration from artists for writing. According to Newton he was able to be succesful because "he leaned in the shoulders of giants".