Help correct my poem 1

November 3, 2020 1:33am CST
Hello mylotters, would you please recheck my poem below? If you find grammar errors or weird sentences, please give some words suggestion :-) I'm sprawling on the frozen land, As the red twilight set up on the horizon I'm shrouded in mega fog, While the sun stepping down into the darkness I'm a man that's missing my night moon… Here I'm… Remembering you…as always I did, To the time we cohered to form a spring flower In the blooming season, in the tender air Inch by inch… Universal's blessing brings you Forming you to its plenary imaginary  You come in a floral scent
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• India
3 Nov 20
Very good
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4 Nov 20
Thank you so much my friend for reviewing my poem :-)
• India
4 Nov 20
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• United States
5 Nov 20
Perfect!
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6 Nov 20
Thank you, the poem has been accepted by publisher :-)