will someone tell me what they think of this poem?

@nextgen (1888)
India
September 21, 2006 1:58pm CST
I stare into the pool Clear and full of water And I dream of a world Were everyone is a pure As the water in front of me I think of the world And the pool clouds over But as I think of the love I feel Deep in my soul The pool clears And I am soaring high in the sky I am happy Happy in the sky Forever painted In with the clouds As I soar I feel the life in me And the hope I feel And I know who I am And why I am here ya i know its a little well .... you know but whatever
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8 responses
• Indonesia
8 Jun 07
lawful to you is the pursuit of water-game and its use for food,- for the benefit of yourselves and those who travel; but forbidden is the pursuit of land-game;- as long as ye are in the sacred precints or pilgrim garb. and fear Allah, to whom ye shall be gathered back. -the table96
@mtdewgurl74 (18118)
• United States
9 Oct 06
very nice keep up the good work you are very good at it. i liked it and so did alot of the others.
@ssh123 (31096)
• India
6 Oct 06
Simple and meaningful. Thanks.
• United States
6 Oct 06
Bravo! Bravo!.. I write poems myself...I think this one is very good...The best poems always come from the heart..And the one you have up there..Is so true...Good..Good!! Bravo...!! Keep up the good work..
• India
28 Sep 06
i feel this is a poem written for the sake of writing a poem..
@skittlez353 (1404)
• United States
28 Sep 06
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@sweetcakes (3505)
• United States
25 Sep 06
i like it lets hear more
@Schubler (1530)
• Romania
21 Sep 06
It works for me... let`s see more...