My name is money
By hsofyan
@hsofyan (3446)
Jakarta, Indonesia
July 23, 2009 7:12am CST
I only paper,
but all people respectful
I'm not beautiful,
but all people love
I can not move,
but I have everywhere
I do not hidden,
but many people lost their
I always squeezed,
but I make people free
I do not have power,
but I make people power
I sometimes dirty,
but I clean everything
I sometimes smell,
but I fragrant everything
I easily torn,
but I able to damage the intellect
I flammable,
but I able burn emotions
I do not have any sense,
but I can make happy
I do not have mind,
but I can make suffer
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2 responses
@squallming (1775)
• Malaysia
23 Jul 12
Well, this poem is easy to understand and it is straight to the point where everything is delivered in a pretty straight forward manner. I don't want to comment much about the lack of literary devices, yet I do realize some lines do not really complement one another. And sometimes there is uses of the word but yet it isn't suitable to be placed in certain lines. There is also lines which seems to be lack of something to make it sound proper, or maybe the wrong choice of word. For example, I do not have any sense, but I can make happy.
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@buenavida (9984)
• Sweden
11 Apr 11
Interesting poem, keep on writing..
We all need to express ourselves and poetry is an excellent way. I have learned a lot by writing and I love to write in English even if I am not 100% skilled in the language. But we are here to learn, so no problem..
Have a great day...
We all need to express ourselves and poetry is an excellent way. I have learned a lot by writing and I love to write in English even if I am not 100% skilled in the language. But we are here to learn, so no problem..
Have a great day...