Be Still

By sofs
@sofssu (23662)
July 15, 2016 1:35am CST
Be still, The magic of morn, As gold dust descends On blushes of red and yellow, Fragrance of flowers enticingly bold, Chirping of birds and buzzing bees, Wrap the earth with peace, Perfect ease, Be still! This poem follows the Rictameter form of poetry. Its a nine line poem which follows a strict syllabic structure. The first line starts with two syllables, and increments upward by two syllables for each line until it reaches ten. From there the syllable count decreases until it reaches two in the last line. The first line and the last line use the same words. Do you like writing poetry?
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@Shyamalaa (525)
• Udaipur, India
15 Jul 16
I am not much of a poetry person, but your lines are beautiful and interesting information too about the structure of the poem. Will look forward to more posts from you
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@sofssu (23662)
15 Jul 16
@Shyamalaa Glad you like them.. I just posted that extra information because for those who write poetry the forms are an interesting challenge to do.
@ridingbet (66861)
• Philippines
16 Jul 16
nice poem; unfortunately, i have no talent at all in poetry making. hahahah!
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@sofssu (23662)
16 Jul 16
@ridingbet Hey, you changed your name.. Thankfully you have the same avatar. Thanks for stopping by to read it though you don't write poetry.. Talent is something hidden until you give it free reign.. when it comes to the fore you discover it. I am sure you have many other talents.
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@sofssu (23662)
20 Jul 16
@ridingbet So true. I am not talented that way.
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@ridingbet (66861)
• Philippines
22 Jul 16
@sofssu but i think you have some talents that you thought you don't have.
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@skysnap (20154)
15 Jul 16
Thats a nice piece there. I never tried poetry.
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@sofssu (23662)
15 Jul 16
@skysnap I am glad you like it.. I just didn't feeling like writing anything else today.
@skysnap (20154)
15 Jul 16
@sofssu I have those moment everyday with job and other projects. I just push myself to do things sometimes.
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@sofssu (23662)
15 Jul 16
@skysnap I don't push myself on this site I do what I enjoy.. its fun.
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@jaboUK (64363)
• United Kingdom
18 Jul 16
I do write poetry, but have never tried this form. Yours is beautiful.
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@sofssu (23662)
18 Jul 16
@jaboUK I started reading your posts on the other sites only because your poetry interested me.. I can enjoy any form of poetry and I like to experiment with some forms.
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@sofssu (23662)
18 Jul 16
@jaboUK Yes I think from childhood.. I did a lot on hubpages.. I had an account just for poetry and I learned a lot there from some wonderful poets there.
@jaboUK (64363)
• United Kingdom
18 Jul 16
@sofssu Have you always written poetry? I only started 2 years ago when it was National Poetry Month and people were joining in on Bubblews. I had a go and found that it wasn't too difficult, though I wouldn't call myself a poet. I'm more of just a rhymester.
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@Jessicalynnt (50525)
• Centralia, Missouri
16 Jul 16
If I have heard of this type before, it's been years. I rather like it. Lovely piece
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@sofssu (23662)
16 Jul 16
@Jessicalynnt Thank you.. I do experiment with various forms of poetry.. At one point I was only writing haiku.. but as the season change so does my interests.. But I love poetry.
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• Centralia, Missouri
16 Jul 16
@sofssu I was never good at limericks or haikus
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@sofssu (23662)
17 Jul 16
@Jessicalynnt I never seriously tried limericks.. but I have done a ton of haikus.. Not so much these days.
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@Lucky15 (37346)
• Philippines
16 Jul 16
Wish i could really make one ;(
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@sofssu (23662)
17 Jul 16
@Lucky15 I agree its the first step that is difficult.
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@sofssu (23662)
16 Jul 16
@Lucky15 I am sure you can do it. Just give yourself a little more time.
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@Lucky15 (37346)
• Philippines
16 Jul 16
@sofssu i can feel i can. Just have that "ump" to make me make one. Lol
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@else34 (13517)
• New Delhi, India
15 Jul 16
@sofssu,What a poem!! I wonder how you wrote it.I have emotions and imagination too,but I can't write poems,especially in English.A few years back I had written some,but they all are in Hindi,my mother tongue.
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@sofssu (23662)
15 Jul 16
@else34 Translate it and post them here.. I have been telling you this for a long time since we met on the other site.
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• United States
15 Jul 16
'tis jest lovely, my friend. i enjoy poetry immensely, but dislike the 'forms', lol. i'm more'f a free-natured kinda gal :D
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@sofssu (23662)
16 Jul 16
@crazyhorseladycx The forms are just to challenge yourself.. the free flow of emotions is what I like in poetry.. when you can combine form and free flow its fun.
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@sofssu (23662)
17 Jul 16
@crazyhorseladycx I am sure you have much more to your credit than you lay claim to .. I guess I have a vague idea of what you mean.. I am so happy that you still spend time here to entertain us with your lovely animal stories.
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• United States
17 Jul 16
@sofssu i fear i aint much fer conformity, lol. the biggest challenges most days jest bein' wakin' 'p :D 'n my younger days though, such 'twas a great passion 'n i penned many a line'n various forms. 'twas quite liberatin' actually. these days if'n i can get 'nough words to make a semi-sensible sentence, i'm doin' good.
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• United States
15 Jul 16
Beautiful poem...this is exactly what I see and feel when I sit outside in the early morning and enjoy my quiet and a cup of coffee
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@sofssu (23662)
15 Jul 16
@Marilynda1225 I am glad to have echoed your feelings.. Morning time is kind of sacred to me.
@shubhu3 (36465)
• New Delhi, India
16 Jul 16
The poem is beautiful. I don't write poetry yet it fascinates me.
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@sofssu (23662)
16 Jul 16
@shubhu3 No, you don't have to write poetry for it to enthrall you.
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@shubhu3 (36465)
• New Delhi, India
16 Jul 16
@sofssu That is also true.Nice.
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@magallon (19281)
• Philippines
15 Jul 16
I do. There are times that I write my discussions here in rhyming words. But I am not a poet so don't really write poems.
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@sofssu (23662)
15 Jul 16
@magallon I won't claim to be a poet but since I love poetry I dabble in it.
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@ilocosboy (45161)
• Philippines
15 Jul 16
yah i use to write a poem but in our dialect
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@sofssu (23662)
15 Jul 16
@ilocosboy Is it in Tagalog or other dialects? Why not translate and post them here it would be fun and a change from the normal discussions.
@responsiveme (22932)
• India
15 Jul 16
That was a good one.It is describing the morning perfectly . I don't know about form so this is something I learnt from you.Thanks. i am not a poet but a great reader ... Am dabbling in rhymes on mylot.
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@sofssu (23662)
16 Jul 16
@responsiveme I am not a poet either.. love dabbling in free flow and forms as well. Its a way of giving expression to those deeply felt emotions in words clothed with beauty.
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