NaNoWriMo Book Project - New Horizons - Excerpt

@just4him (323168)
Green Bay, Wisconsin
November 4, 2017 12:28pm CST
I thought you might like a taste of the book I'm writing for the NaNoWriMo 50K challenge. This is from the first chapter. It is day 4 of the 30 day challenge and as of right now I have 9637 words and three completed chapters. All-expense paid trip to Buenos Aires for qualified musician, willing to teach music and tour the country, playing at various festivals and events. Must audition. Selection will be made when all auditions have been heard. Looking for a variety of musical talent, room for ten talented musicians. The qualified musician will receive a good salary and a teaching position. Opportunities include playing at various festivals and events. Lodging provided. Must apply for passport before audition if you do not have one. Qualified musicians will depart JKF International Airport in New York City on June first. She paid the audition fee, and arrived half an hour before she was to perform. She heard other good musicians on a variety of instruments. Peter had encouraged her to audition, though he wasn’t able to participate due to family and job obligations. She was the only member of the group who didn’t have any commitments she couldn’t get out of. Shanara encouraged her brother to audition as well, and was delighted when he did. He was between job commitments at the moment, so the audition came at a good time for him. She was given ten minutes to perform her selection. She had chosen Tchaikovsky’s Violin Concerto in D Major op. 35. Ten minutes wasn’t long enough to do the piece justice, but it was enough to let the judges know her talent. Shanara verified she had her passport at the time of the audition. She had received the acceptance letter two weeks after the audition, along with her plane ticket and told to bring whatever she wanted to make her feel comfortable. So, she did. She packed everything she owned in four large suitcases, garment bag, cosmetic case, and trunk. Her father entered the room. As slim as her mother was, her father was broad-shouldered, husky, dark brown hair and eyes to match. “Your mother said you were ready. Are you sure you have everything? You didn’t leave anything behind?” he said, a grin on his face as he looked around the bare room. “I have everything, Dad. Now, I have a plane to catch.” Her brother entered the room behind their father. “I have all my bags and trunk in the car already. What’s taking you so long?” Shanara looked at her brother, a smile on her face, grateful to have his company on the trip. “I’m glad you’re going with me. It won’t feel so lonely. Besides, unlike you, I want to be prepared for anything.” “Welcome to Aerolineas Argentinas flight 1301. It’s winter in Buenos Aires, with a temperature of 65º and sunny, though it is expected to be 48º when we land at 4:30 in the morning. My name is Captain Fredericks and my co-pilot is Captain Everson. Enjoy your flight.” As they prepared for take-off, the flight attendants went through the emergency landing information, showing them where the emergency exit was on the plane, and where the life preservers could be found if it became necessary. They also showed the position they would need to take should they crash. “Do you want to watch the movie?” said Michael. “What are they showing?” “They have a selection, one is Let There be Light.” “Really? I haven’t seen that one yet. So, yeah, let’s watch it.” As soon as the seatbelt light went off, Shanara and Michael unbuckled their seatbelts and leaned their seats back to enjoy the movie. They had just finished a late-night snack when the plane went through an electrical storm. Lightning flashed around the plane, but there weren’t any clouds in sight, at least none that Shanara could see as she gazed out the window. The seatbelt sign came on, and everyone put their seats in an upright position and prepared for the worst. Only the worst didn’t happen, at least not from what Shanara could see, or not see. “That was a strange storm. What can you see out the window?” said Michael. “Nothing. I mean, literally, nothing. Before the storm there was ocean beneath us, now there isn’t even water.” Suddenly the plane took a sharp turn upward and Shanara could see the mountain peak in front of them. “Where did that come from?” said Michael. “I have a feeling we’re not on earth anymore,” said one of the passengers, her eyes glued to the window. “I bet you’re right. Nothing looks familiar,” said a male passenger. As soon as the plane righted itself, the captain came on. “I know many of you are wondering where we are. So are we. Our navigational charts are useless. We had just passed into what is commonly known as the Bermuda Triangle, and though I’ve flown this path many times, nothing like what we just experienced, has ever happened before. We are looking for a place to land, and hope we can find a civilization who will not shoot first and ask questions later. For now, please keep calm. You will know what is happening at the same time we do. Captain Fredericks out.” “Okay. Now I’m glad I packed as much as you did,” said Michael. “Mom said you packed a trunk, so I know you don’t have just your clothes.” “We were going to be gone for a year, so I thought it best not to leave anything behind.” “That’s not our moon,” said a male passenger behind them. “No, it’s not,” said Shanara, seeing a larger moon than she was used to seeing. “Look over there. Is that another planet?” said a woman, a few rows ahead of them. Shanara focused on the terrain below them and the moons or planets she saw out the window amid a vast array of stars. It was clear they were no longer on earth, but where they were, she hoped they would soon find out.
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@Hannihar (130150)
• Israel
31 Dec 17
Valerie, I love it and it is full of excitement and want to know if they make it to their destination or are stranded somewhere else.
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@just4him (323168)
• Green Bay, Wisconsin
31 Dec 17
It's clear they're no longer on earth from the excerpt. This has also gone through some changes, especially regarding the movie, which just came out in November. I had to find a movie that was out in June of this year. I'm glad you like it. I'm still working on it.
@just4him (323168)
• Green Bay, Wisconsin
31 Dec 17
@Hannihar Thank you.
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@Hannihar (130150)
• Israel
31 Dec 17
@just4him Valerie you are a great writer.
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@Bluedoll (16770)
• Canada
5 Nov 17
You have a nice style of writing. I'm able to go along on the journey too. I like the announcement part. Neat! In print the dialogues will receive one space?
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@Bluedoll (16770)
• Canada
5 Nov 17
@just4him No big deal. Yeah you have to go in and manually change it I think. You can get double space? Not sure now. Anyway, it was really nice of you to supply an excerpt.
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@just4him (323168)
• Green Bay, Wisconsin
5 Nov 17
@Bluedoll I saw that and I wasn't going to do that. I can get double space by fixing it in my Word document. I prefer the single though as it is what I need for the self-publishing company I deal with. Thanks, I'm glad you liked it.
@just4him (323168)
• Green Bay, Wisconsin
5 Nov 17
I hate that the site takes it completely out of format. Yes, I single space and add a space for pov change. There is two separate sections here, the first near the beginning of the chapter, the second the end of the chapter.
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• United States
4 Nov 17
Sounds like an interesting journey is ahead of them. You do write very well Valerie!
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@just4him (323168)
• Green Bay, Wisconsin
4 Nov 17
Thank you very much. I came to the end for today. Word count 10286. I'm pretty happy about that. I've started Chapter 4.
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@celticeagle (189820)
• Boise, Idaho
5 Nov 17
This excerpt sounds like quite a adventure.
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@just4him (323168)
• Green Bay, Wisconsin
5 Nov 17
Thank you. It's interesting so far.
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@Courtlynn (67089)
• United States
4 Nov 17
Wow. You really are a great writer.
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@just4him (323168)
• Green Bay, Wisconsin
4 Nov 17
Thank you for the great praise.
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@Courtlynn (67089)
• United States
4 Nov 17
@just4him anytime!
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@Kandae11 (57233)
4 Nov 17
Ha ha - I am anxious to read more. It is well know that planes and ships disappear in the Bermuda triangle , and I wonder why that route is not avoided.
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@just4him (323168)
• Green Bay, Wisconsin
4 Nov 17
I'm glad you enjoyed the excerpt. Thank you. I don't know, but it made for a good idea for the book, from the other side of the disappearance.
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@Kandae11 (57233)
4 Nov 17
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@bluesa (15022)
• Johannesburg, South Africa
4 Nov 17
I have always wondered what happens to those planes that disappear over the Bermuda Triangle... Very intriguing! :)
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@just4him (323168)
• Green Bay, Wisconsin
4 Nov 17
I've wondered about it too. Makes for an interesting story. Thank you.
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