31 Day Writing Tips - Day 23

@just4him (156323)
Green Bay, Wisconsin
May 23, 2019 6:05pm CST
Thank you for those of you who look forward to these tips. Today's writing tip concerns the info dump. When you start writing, people tend to start with the backstory and tell everything about the situation and in doing so, lose their audience before the end of the first paragraph. You want your reader to know your characters, their personality, and the time period they live in or the planet they're on, depending on what genre you're working with. However, there's a right way and wrong way to do that. I once picked up the book Ben Hur from the library. I couldn't get past the first couple of pages because it was all information about the time period. How do you overcome that and get your reader interested in your book? Sprinkle it in where appropriate. Not all at once. You might start with a paragraph showing location for your character but get to the dialogue as soon as possible. Interaction between characters can show as much information about the time period, genre, location as several pages of info dump does. And it does a better job of keeping your reader engaged in the story. As your story moves along, your reader will get a good idea of where your characters are and what they are doing from the dialogue. Yes, the description is necessary to the book, but don't over describe. Don't under describe either. You don't want to leave the person wondering what just happened and cut him out of the story. Remember, your reader is on the same journey as your characters. Let them look around the location and see where they are. Build tension with dialogue. You won't get tension in an info dump. Below is an excerpt from my book New Horizons - Predators and Blue Fire. I hope it shows you what I'm talking about. Information, but not too much. I'm sorry about the formatting, which myLot takes out. It's the end of the first chapter. They finished a late-night snack when the plane went through an electrical storm. Lightning flashed around the plane, but there weren’t any clouds in sight, at least none Shanara could see as she gazed out the window. It reminded her of movies about a spacecraft forced through space at an excessive speed. She expected to see dark billowy clouds below them, indicating rain, but there was nothing. She also found it strange that flying above the clouds, they would get caught in an electrical storm, something she would expect below the clouds. However, she couldn’t see the sky or clouds. The seatbelt sign came on, and everyone put their seats in an upright position, preparing for the worst. Only the worst didn’t happen, at least not from what Shanara could see, or not see. “That was a strange storm. What can you see out the window?” questioned Michael. “Nothing. I mean, literally, nothing. Before the storm there was an ocean beneath us, now there isn’t even water.” Suddenly, the plane took a sharp turn upward, and Shanara could see the mountain peak in front of them. “Where did that come from?” queried Michael. “I have a feeling we’re not on earth anymore,” remarked one of the passengers, her eyes glued to the window. “I bet you’re right. Nothing looks familiar,” replied a male passenger. As soon as the plane righted itself, the captain came on the intercom. “I know many of you are wondering where we are. So are we. Our navigational charts are useless. We passed into what is known as the Bermuda Triangle, and though I’ve flown this route many times, nothing like what we experienced, ever happened before. Some of you saw an electrical storm out your window. That wasn’t an electrical storm. It was a wormhole. I know what you might be thinking. You’re not in the Twilight Zone. However, wormholes are a theory, which just became fact. We are looking for a place to land and hope we can find a civilization who will not shoot first and ask questions later. For now, please remain calm. You will know what is happening at the same time we do. Captain Fredericks out.” “Okay. Now I’m glad I packed as much as you did,” remarked Michael. “That’s not our moon,” stated a male passenger behind them. “No, it’s not,” agreed Shanara, seeing a larger moon than she was used to seeing. “Look over there. Is that another planet?” pointed a woman, a few rows ahead of them. Shanara focused on the terrain below them and the moons or planets she saw out the window amid a vast array of stars. It was clear they were no longer on Earth, but where they were, she hoped they would soon find out. I hope this helps show you how to give your information to the reader and keep your reader engaged in your story. Thanks for reading. Image courtesy of Pixabay.
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@celticeagle (122844)
• Boise, Idaho
23 May
Interesting. I have to work on my conversation.
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@just4him (156323)
• Green Bay, Wisconsin
23 May
That's why I'm posting these tips, to show how to become a good writer. I know I need these tips too.
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@celticeagle (122844)
• Boise, Idaho
23 May
@just4him ........That's good.
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@hexeduser22 (6708)
• Philippines
24 May
Thank you for this tip. I want to read your book. I became hooked after reading the first few lines. I was seeing what Shanara was seeing while I was reading. I wanted to write a book too. A fantasy one, for my kids to read. I hope I can write one someday.
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@just4him (156323)
• Green Bay, Wisconsin
24 May
Thank you very much. I hope you can. You're welcome.
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• Philippines
26 May
@just4him I will treasure these tips. It's really hard to find quality tips like this without paying for it. Thank you for sharing it. It really helped me.
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@just4him (156323)
• Green Bay, Wisconsin
26 May
@hexeduser22 I wouldn't think about charging for them. I'm not an expert, only passing on what I've learned. I'm glad they are helpful.
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@Gillygirl (29885)
• Sutton, England
23 May
Is this showing rather than telling? I attended creative writing classes many years ago and similar tips were given.
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@just4him (156323)
• Green Bay, Wisconsin
24 May
I believe it is. I would need to read up on showing versus telling to know for certain.
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@Gillygirl (29885)
• Sutton, England
24 May
@just4him I'm fairly sure that is what my teacher meant. This was nearly thirty years ago
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@just4him (156323)
• Green Bay, Wisconsin
24 May
@Gillygirl It was. Thanks for the subject for the next tip.
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@Nakitakona (4002)
23 May
I learned something here like "Don't say it all." It should rather be sprinkled somewhere in the story. I do write short story. I am compiling your tips for my ready references. Thanks.
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@just4him (156323)
• Green Bay, Wisconsin
24 May
You're welcome. I'm glad it's helpful.
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24 May
@just4him It's indeed helpful. Thanks for sharing it.
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@just4him (156323)
• Green Bay, Wisconsin
24 May
@Nakitakona You're welcome.
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@CarolDM (28140)
• United States
23 May
I only write my thoughts. You are so creative and talented.
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@just4him (156323)
• Green Bay, Wisconsin
24 May
Thank you.
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@xander6464 (13963)
• Wapello, Iowa
24 May
I'm glad you chose to cover this. Writing fiction is like playing chess, the opening move is vitally important and needs to be played just right. Striking the balance you mentioned is crucial. It also applies to nonfiction, just not quite as much. Your story is impressive. I would write things like that. Stuff like transporting planeloads of people to different worlds via wormholes, if I had any imagination. But I don't.
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@just4him (156323)
• Green Bay, Wisconsin
24 May
Thank you. Yes, it is like a game of chess. Good analogy. You've shown a lot of imagination in your posts. It was and is a fun story to write. This one will be a ten-book series. I've started book two. I'm just waiting for the title to show up. Right now, it's called The Next Chapter.
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@xander6464 (13963)
• Wapello, Iowa
25 May
@just4him Working titles are fun and sometimes I wish the author would have stuck with them.
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@just4him (156323)
• Green Bay, Wisconsin
25 May
@xander6464 Sometimes they are, but the title for the second book in the series isn't one that will stick. I can't have a title The Next Chapter. What does that do for someone who wants to read the New Horizon's series? Nothing and they might not want to read the first book with a title like that for the second.
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@dya80dya (15313)
• Romania
24 May
I write in a diary. This is a good tip.
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@just4him (156323)
• Green Bay, Wisconsin
25 May
Thank you.
@bagarad (13895)
• Paso Robles, California
24 May
You certainly did get me engaged with that. Are you still working on that book or have you already published it?
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@just4him (156323)
• Green Bay, Wisconsin
24 May
This one is finished, but it's a long ways from being published. It's the first in a multi-book series. I want at least three finished before I publish this one. I'm working on getting my older books published first. Thank you. I appreciate you enjoyed it.
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