September 27, 2007 3:47am CST
The inspiration to write my thoughts about my experience and my surroundings started back in elementary, when some of the students from our school were invited to write a haiku - a Japanese form of poem, and this was on the local TV station - NHK. I never really remember the show, but I recall receiving a comment that the poem I made somewhat had two different topics in it, and to the experts it sounded funny. I can say that I must have made a fool of myself in front of the Japanese national television, but nonetheless, it was one of my most unforgettable memories. Since then, I started to become conscious of how I think and how I can collectively gather my thoughts and put them in words. I guess the best tool that I have taught myself to adapt, is writing my own experience, and in a simple form. Free verse and free spirited which is writing my mind and my feelings the closest I can describe it in words. Here is an example of my latest inspired by my mother's death in 2004. MOTHER For nine months you sheltered me in your womb. Protected me from harm As I came out to see the world, you selflessly and unconditionally showered me with your love. When the man of the house was not always around and nowhere to be found. Mother, you stood tall and shouldered the responsibilities alone. Making sure that my needs were met and made me see the beauty of life. I thank God for I was given to you. As I grow older but not considerably wiser, I started to go against your will. Little did I know that your concerns and constant reminders were for my own good. I made you cry so many times The tears that I made you shed is a reminder that Despite my rebellion and anger against the world had no reason at all to be tolerated. Your PATIENCE saved me. Your LOVE guided me. Your HAND led me. Your SMILE greeted me, That tomorrow will always be a better day. A better day to realize that your existence was my life And will live on as my gift from God. I was not the only blessing from God to you. Sometimes I did not let you hear it, And even if I can't see you now You are beside me Smiling for the person I've become Mother, I will never forget To THANK YOU for everything that you are to me. Your LOVE will forever be my sweetest memory.
27 Sep 07
Hello fortunebee :) I'm not really a poet so I'm sorry as I cannot comment intelligently on the technical aspect of the way it's written except that, shouldn't it be divided into paragraphs? Anyways, as an audience/reader I just want to say that I like this composition. Simple and easy to understand yet full of emotions. I was able to relate to the message at once. I really love the following lines: Your PATIENCE saved me Your LOVE guided me Your HAND led me Your SMILE greeted me. Thanks for sharing. I love the subject :)
27 Sep 07
Thank you! I got used to typing down my poems per line, free stanza, that is. I am also not very knowledgeable of the literature's technicalities, but I would like it to be as unrestricted as possible. I have more to share. In my past time, I sometimes ask my friends to give me a subject and I compose one from there. I believe anyone can do this more naturally if they based it on their experience and surrounding. This is how I relieve myself from the world sometimes! (^_^)