Yo-Yo (WARNING THIS POEM SUCKS!)
@additional001 (213)
United States
July 11, 2009 6:13pm CST
By my own definition this poem SUCKS... however when I began to write poetry... i sat down one night and just wrote. Of that night three of my works were born. Yo-Yo is the second one I posted here. Beauty and the Beast Being the other... lol maybe one day I'll post the third one as well (it sucks too! LOL)FYI the poem isn't REALLY about a yo-yo LOL. Without further delay...
Yo-Yo
You toss me away
Yet I always come back
Why is that?
A slight tug
at my string sends me spiraling back
Why is that?
I have no control
as I spin aimlessly
Why is that?
You play tricks
I dangle and then you snatch me back
Why is that?
Age wears the string thin
Finally it breaks and I am free
Your hold is broken; or is it?
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@Wizzywig (7847)
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11 Jul 09
I'd say your own definition is wrong 
The fact that you just sat down one night and wrote it suggests a true creativity which is always better that a piece you've had to sit and think about for ages. I think the imagery is good. I dont analyse creative writing, I just like what I like 
The fact that you just sat down one night and wrote it suggests a true creativity which is always better that a piece you've had to sit and think about for ages. I think the imagery is good. I dont analyse creative writing, I just like what I like 1 person likes this
@additional001 (213)
• United States
11 Jul 09
LOL thanks sometimes I think writers are their own worst critics!
@allegradream (210)
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16 Jul 09
Another fantastic one...and it doesnt suck lol, I think the title yoyo says it all about how you were feeling when you wrote this :)
@clutterbug (1051)
• United States
11 Jul 09
You have (had) a good imagination. I like when the Yo-Yo is finally free, it's like paybacks for all the years of usage, lol. Your poems are just fine. Don't stop, we poets are a dying breed!
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