My submission to Poetry challenge by Jessa Lyn / myLot

@rocky1980 (530)

Chandigarh, India

December 8, 2015 8:49am CST

here is my first poem ever: no rhyme, no song no right, no wrong no romance, no love no kiss, no hug no fight, no blow no rain, no snow no job, no payday no tomorrow, no yesterday no smell, no scent no potent, no impotent heavily or lightly gently or softly no complaint or rant living in hell with a eggplant. Aknowledement: Inspired by Steve West and Jessa Lyn. Credit to you guys. I could write because you.

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Erly Maglangit

@cacay1 (83237)

• Cagayan De Oro, Philippines

10 Dec 15

@rocky1980,So awesome descriptions about the realities of life exposed through your poem: struggles, faded love, faded glory, sane fantasy, and cherished moments without love and hope in return

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narinder

@rocky1980 (530)

• Chandigarh, India

10 Dec 15

thanks for such a detailed review. Having a tough time for the last two years. Starting fresh and hoping good things next year

sofs

@sofssu (23662)

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10 Dec 15

That was funny the last line did it.

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narinder

@rocky1980 (530)

• Chandigarh, India

10 Dec 15

thanks

hereandthere

@hereandthere (45651)

• Philippines

8 Dec 15

i found myself laughing at the end. it's like a great punchline. but overall it's really good. congrats!

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narinder

@rocky1980 (530)

• Chandigarh, India

8 Dec 15

thanks, All through the poem I could not find better place for egg plant, so I thought it would better if it stayed with me in hell.

Margaret Mwangi

@Missmwngi (12926)

• Nairobi, Kenya

11 Dec 15

I was to take up this challenge and i forgot thank you for the reminder Nice piece

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narinder

@rocky1980 (530)

• Chandigarh, India

12 Dec 15

thanks for your review.

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Margaret Mwangi

@Missmwngi (12926)

• Nairobi, Kenya

12 Dec 15

@rocky1980 Mmmh much welcome

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Reine25

@Lucky15 (37346)

• Philippines

9 Dec 15

Wow. You did great

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narinder

@rocky1980 (530)

• Chandigarh, India

9 Dec 15

thanks for your feedback.

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@VivaLaDani13 (60681)

• Perth, Australia

20 Oct 16

@rocky1980 lol cute. I liked it.

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****DANIELLE****

@VivaLaDani13 (60681)

• Perth, Australia

21 Oct 16

@Daljinder Yeah I know. Just still following the same procedure anyways.

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@Daljinder (23233)

• Bangalore, India

20 Oct 16

@VivaLaDani13 Hasn't been active since December 29

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Koalemos

@Asylum (47893)

• Manchester, England

8 Dec 15

I very good approach to the task and a very good result.

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narinder

@rocky1980 (530)

• Chandigarh, India

8 Dec 15

thanks for your feedback.

Arthur Chappell

@arthurchappell (45002)

• Preston, England

8 Dec 15

very well done - I'd have been happy to have written this myself. Your English is better than you think.

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narinder

@rocky1980 (530)

• Chandigarh, India

8 Dec 15

thanks for encouraging me. I actually copied steve west's rhyme scheme. 'My love Mylot something'. I am glad you read it. Appreciate it.

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Anna

@LadyDuck (460403)

• Switzerland

8 Dec 15

Congratulations, this is very good, you write English very well.

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narinder

@rocky1980 (530)

• Chandigarh, India

8 Dec 15

thanks, I don't know what to say. but I am happy I could do it after committing to Jessa Lyn. She encouraged me to write it. so all credit goes to her. She is a very good human being.

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Jabo

@jaboUK (64361)

• United Kingdom

11 Dec 15

Great - you've come up with a very good response to the challenge. I did think about doing one myself, but that eggplant and potent were hard to weave into anything sensible.

Wendy789

@Drosophila (16573)

• Ireland

9 Dec 15

Lol... living in hell with a eggplant. that made me lol

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