My Coma

@inertia4 (27961)

United States

August 4, 2016 7:48pm CST

I’m tired right now I want to go to sleep I can’t stay awake But I’m falling too deep Tomorrow will come But I might not see it What have I done I have been depleted I drop to the floor Clutching my chest I’m falling asleep I really need some rest My body is weak I have no control I’m deeply asleep I’m losing my soul The pain and the fear Are going away now But I still see and hear Too tired to take a bow I babble and blink While my cigarette burns I hear dripping in the sink But I’m unable to turn I see on the counter The scissors and knife Don’t anything matter This is now my life I see colors that change I hear mumbling outside I am now ready to purge And take that descending ride Copyright © 2014 Steven Cetta All Rights Reserved inertia4, My, Coma, Poem, inertia4poetry Image Credit : CoolText.com

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@crossbones27 (48487)

• Mojave, California

5 Aug 16

Nothing a little sleep could not help. lol Great stuff.

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@crossbones27 (48487)

• Mojave, California

5 Aug 16

@inertia4 I prefer silly over being angry. lol

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@inertia4 (27961)

• United States

5 Aug 16

LOL. Thanks. I try. I guess everyone is in a silly mood tonight. Cool.

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@Mike197602 (15487)

• United Kingdom

5 Aug 16

@inertia4 I am in a silly mood but the poem was good...sorry if I've sort of made fun of you as that wasn't my intention

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@velvet53 (22528)

• Palisade, Colorado

20 Aug 16

This is quite a deep poem that you have written but it is a great one. I love reading your poems.

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@velvet53 (22528)

• Palisade, Colorado

21 Aug 16

@inertia4 You are most welcome. I should start writing poems again.

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@inertia4 (27961)

• United States

21 Aug 16

@velvet53 You should. And this is the best place to post. I am happy that I have friends like you on MyLot. It makes being here that much more worth it.

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@inertia4 (27961)

• United States

20 Aug 16

Thank you. I don't know how deep it is. But I know it is on the dark side. And thank you for liking my poetry.

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@MandaLee (3758)

• United States

15 Mar 17

I love the imagery.

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@inertia4 (27961)

• United States

19 Mar 17

Wow, thank you. I really appreciate that. I do try my best. Glad you enjoyed it.

Charlene Sally Collins

@OreoBrownie (3755)

• Commerce, Georgia

9 Sep 16

Nice poem. Makes me think k about dying.

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@inertia4 (27961)

• United States

9 Sep 16

Well, that is sad. But it is on the dark side. So I guess it did it's job.

@jaboUK (64361)

• United Kingdom

5 Aug 16

Very well put, were you in a dark place when you wrote it?

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@inertia4 (27961)

• United States

5 Aug 16

Honestly, no I wasn't. This i something I think manifested from watching horror or suspense movies. There are some poems I have that have some real life elements in them. But this is not one of them.

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@inertia4 (27961)

• United States

5 Aug 16

@jaboUK True. I think that is true for most of us that write stories or poems. I like to make them seem real. I think they have a bigger impact that way.

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@jaboUK (64361)

• United Kingdom

5 Aug 16

@inertia4 I'm glad about that. Some of my poems have nothing to do with my personal experiences either, but come across as if they are.

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@Mike197602 (15487)

• United Kingdom

5 Aug 16

if you're in a coma who is writing this

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@inertia4 (27961)

• United States

5 Aug 16

LOL. Hey Now!!! LOL. I love that comment. Awesome. Now why didn't I think of that. LOL. That is priceless.

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@Mike197602 (15487)

• United Kingdom

5 Aug 16

@inertia4 get well soon

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@inertia4 (27961)

• United States

5 Aug 16

@Mike197602 Nice!!! You should write some one liners. LOL. I love these comments. Thanks.

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@jstory07 (134754)

• Roseburg, Oregon

6 Aug 16

I think you need to get some sleep. i love what you wrote.

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@inertia4 (27961)

• United States

6 Aug 16

LOL. Nice!!! No I don't need sleep. And thank you for liking this.

@simone10 (54189)

• Louisville, Kentucky

9 Aug 16

After reading your poem, it does seem like you need to get some sleep. I feel like that sometimes. By the way, great poem.

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@inertia4 (27961)

• United States

9 Aug 16

LOL. No, no need for sleep right now. Thank you for liking my poem. I like to skirt the edges of insanity sometimes. LOL.

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Valerie J. Routhieaux

@just4him (307773)

• Green Bay, Wisconsin

9 Aug 16

Very dark poem. Well written.

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@inertia4 (27961)

• United States

9 Aug 16

Thank you. Yes, it is dark. I do tend to lean that way. And it also has to do with the mood or the inspiration at the time.

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@JESSY3236 (19008)

• United States

5 Aug 16

cool poem.

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@inertia4 (27961)

• United States

5 Aug 16

Well, thank you very much.

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Claudia Kirkland

@CRK109 (14558)

• United States

6 Aug 16

I've thought about how that would feel. This has a real ring of truth to me.

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@inertia4 (27961)

• United States

6 Aug 16

Thank you for liking my poem. It does have a real feel to it. That's what I wanted. I guess anything can be interpreted i many ways.

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@RubyHawk (99423)

• Atlanta, Georgia

5 Aug 16

That's very good, I like it.

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@inertia4 (27961)

• United States

5 Aug 16

Thank you very much for that.

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@83908390yulsi (229)

• Guernsey

6 Aug 16

Nice, it's really dark and reminds my once upon a time writings.

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@inertia4 (27961)

• United States

6 Aug 16

Thank you. Yes, some of my stuff is on the dark side. But I tend to lean that way.

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@teresatrotter (4073)

• Jacksonville, Florida

24 Aug 16

A lot of good emotion in that...

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@inertia4 (27961)

• United States

28 Aug 16

Thank you. I always try. Glad you enjoyed it.

@Hatley (163781)

• Garden Grove, California

5 Aug 16

you just get better and better you were wasted on that darned bublews.I really like your poetry at lot.

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@inertia4 (27961)

• United States

5 Aug 16

Thank you very much. I really appreciate that. I know I am no professional writer or poet. I know, Bubblews was a waste of time. Now I am home here on MyLot.

@Jessicalynnt (50525)

• Centralia, Missouri

6 Aug 16

this had an amazing cadence to it, and a great flow. It was bittersweet and I quite enjoyed it