My Coma

@inertia4 (27605)
United States
August 4, 2016 7:48pm CST
I’m tired right now I want to go to sleep I can’t stay awake But I’m falling too deep Tomorrow will come But I might not see it What have I done I have been depleted I drop to the floor Clutching my chest I’m falling asleep I really need some rest My body is weak I have no control I’m deeply asleep I’m losing my soul The pain and the fear Are going away now But I still see and hear Too tired to take a bow I babble and blink While my cigarette burns I hear dripping in the sink But I’m unable to turn I see on the counter The scissors and knife Don’t anything matter This is now my life I see colors that change I hear mumbling outside I am now ready to purge And take that descending ride Copyright © 2014 Steven Cetta All Rights Reserved inertia4, My, Coma, Poem, inertia4poetry Image Credit : CoolText.com
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@crossbones27 (19233)
• Redlands, California
5 Aug 16
Nothing a little sleep could not help. lol Great stuff.
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@inertia4 (27605)
• United States
5 Aug 16
LOL. Thanks. I try. I guess everyone is in a silly mood tonight. Cool.
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• Redlands, California
5 Aug 16
@inertia4 I prefer silly over being angry. lol
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@Mike197602 (13368)
• Worcester, England
5 Aug 16
@inertia4 I am in a silly mood but the poem was good...sorry if I've sort of made fun of you as that wasn't my intention
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@velvet53 (16364)
• Palisade, Colorado
20 Aug 16
This is quite a deep poem that you have written but it is a great one. I love reading your poems.
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@inertia4 (27605)
• United States
20 Aug 16
Thank you. I don't know how deep it is. But I know it is on the dark side. And thank you for liking my poetry.
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@velvet53 (16364)
• Palisade, Colorado
21 Aug 16
@inertia4 You are most welcome. I should start writing poems again.
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@inertia4 (27605)
• United States
21 Aug 16
@velvet53 You should. And this is the best place to post. I am happy that I have friends like you on MyLot. It makes being here that much more worth it.
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@Mike197602 (13368)
• Worcester, England
5 Aug 16
if you're in a coma who is writing this
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@inertia4 (27605)
• United States
5 Aug 16
LOL. Hey Now!!! LOL. I love that comment. Awesome. Now why didn't I think of that. LOL. That is priceless.
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@Mike197602 (13368)
• Worcester, England
5 Aug 16
@inertia4 get well soon
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@inertia4 (27605)
• United States
5 Aug 16
@Mike197602 Nice!!! You should write some one liners. LOL. I love these comments. Thanks.
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@jaboUK (53540)
• United Kingdom
5 Aug 16
Very well put, were you in a dark place when you wrote it?
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@inertia4 (27605)
• United States
5 Aug 16
Honestly, no I wasn't. This i something I think manifested from watching horror or suspense movies. There are some poems I have that have some real life elements in them. But this is not one of them.
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@jaboUK (53540)
• United Kingdom
5 Aug 16
@inertia4 I'm glad about that. Some of my poems have nothing to do with my personal experiences either, but come across as if they are.
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@inertia4 (27605)
• United States
5 Aug 16
@jaboUK True. I think that is true for most of us that write stories or poems. I like to make them seem real. I think they have a bigger impact that way.
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@MandaLee (3696)
• United States
15 Mar 17
I love the imagery.
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@inertia4 (27605)
• United States
19 Mar 17
Wow, thank you. I really appreciate that. I do try my best. Glad you enjoyed it.
@OreoBrownie (3526)
• Elberton, Georgia
9 Sep 16
Nice poem. Makes me think k about dying.
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@inertia4 (27605)
• United States
9 Sep 16
Well, that is sad. But it is on the dark side. So I guess it did it's job.
• Jacksonville, Florida
24 Aug 16
A lot of good emotion in that...
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@inertia4 (27605)
• United States
28 Aug 16
Thank you. I always try. Glad you enjoyed it.
@just4him (113414)
• Green Bay, Wisconsin
9 Aug 16
Very dark poem. Well written.
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@inertia4 (27605)
• United States
9 Aug 16
Thank you. Yes, it is dark. I do tend to lean that way. And it also has to do with the mood or the inspiration at the time.
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@simone10 (21664)
• Louisville, Kentucky
9 Aug 16
After reading your poem, it does seem like you need to get some sleep. I feel like that sometimes. By the way, great poem.
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@inertia4 (27605)
• United States
9 Aug 16
LOL. No, no need for sleep right now. Thank you for liking my poem. I like to skirt the edges of insanity sometimes. LOL.
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• Guernsey
6 Aug 16
Nice, it's really dark and reminds my once upon a time writings.
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@inertia4 (27605)
• United States
6 Aug 16
Thank you. Yes, some of my stuff is on the dark side. But I tend to lean that way.
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@CRK109 (14465)
• United States
6 Aug 16
I've thought about how that would feel. This has a real ring of truth to me.
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@inertia4 (27605)
• United States
6 Aug 16
Thank you for liking my poem. It does have a real feel to it. That's what I wanted. I guess anything can be interpreted i many ways.
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@jstory07 (66140)
• Roseburg, Oregon
6 Aug 16
I think you need to get some sleep. i love what you wrote.
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@inertia4 (27605)
• United States
6 Aug 16
LOL. Nice!!! No I don't need sleep. And thank you for liking this.
@JESSY3236 (6289)
• United States
5 Aug 16
cool poem.
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@inertia4 (27605)
• United States
5 Aug 16
Well, thank you very much.
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@RubyHawk (23473)
• Atlanta, Georgia
5 Aug 16
That's very good, I like it.
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@inertia4 (27605)
• United States
5 Aug 16
Thank you very much for that.
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@Hatley (164670)
• Garden Grove, California
5 Aug 16
you just get better and better you were wasted on that darned bublews.I really like your poetry at lot.
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@inertia4 (27605)
• United States
5 Aug 16
Thank you very much. I really appreciate that. I know I am no professional writer or poet. I know, Bubblews was a waste of time. Now I am home here on MyLot.
@TRBRocks420 (75708)
• Banks, Oregon
5 Aug 16
Well done on the poem
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@inertia4 (27605)
• United States
5 Aug 16
Thank you. I try. I know I always say that. But I get inspired from many different things. Thanks again.
• United States
9 Aug 16
This is a bit worrisome . . . are you okay ???
@Jessicalynnt (47789)
• Centralia, Missouri
6 Aug 16
this had an amazing cadence to it, and a great flow. It was bittersweet and I quite enjoyed it