I may write a children's book
By raydene
@raydene (9871)
United States
July 14, 2008 9:19am CST
I have loads of stories from my family that I may put in a book.
Here's one that is shortened. What do you think?
My GreatAuntie used to tell us a story about the
young brave that lost the maiden he loved because she loved another.
He became enraged, took his bow, aimed at the other and let the arrow go.
The Great Spirit seeing the brave in all his foolishment sent Brother Wind
to give the revenge(arrow) to Brother Oak. The Great Spirit thought that the brave
would in time be sorry for what he tried to do and forget his want of the love.
Many moons passed as the brave, with poison in his heart,
spent all his time planning the distruction of the other, thinking he could then
have his love. It was now fall and most of the leaves of Brother Oak were gone.
The Great Spirit had given the brave time to accept this loss but
instead he planned an attack on the other. He had heard that the other would go to
hunt, knowing he would pass close by Brother Oak the brave hid in wait. Just as the
brave was ready, knife in hand to jump atop the other Brother Wind sent by the
Great Spirit blew a very powerful blast throught the bare limbs of Brother Oak
where the arrow had rested. The arrow with speed anew flew through the air straight
into the brave's heart. The arrow aimed at another had killed the one that aimed.
Auntie would say
" So my neices and nephew if you seek to hurt another you will just hurt yourself.
Now remember that you must never ever hurt anyone else in meaning"
It's longer but I have given you a short version!
xxxx
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8 responses
@Vladilyich1 (1454)
• Canada
14 Jul 08
I would definitely like to read that when you get it finished. There is a growing market for children's and young adult's book.
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@royal52gens (5488)
• United States
14 Jul 08
I really like that story. It tells a moral and teaches a lesson. Hopefully the children who read it will learn the lesson and take it to heart. You are a good writer. Each story should be a different book. Then you could have a series of books.
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@GardenGerty (169591)
• United States
14 Jul 08
Very good story with a moral. I agree, you should write a children's book. It would make you feel good and give a lot of pleasure to other people as well. Get going, friend, I will buy a copy for my granddaughter.
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@faith210 (11224)
• Philippines
16 Jul 08
Hi raydene! Oh that is wonderful! I am sure you can do it and will be successful so! i like the story and could really be interesting for the kids. I fight it interesting too and love the moral/ lesson of the story. Good luck and I hope I will see your book published soon!
Take care and God Bless!
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@fifileigh (3615)
• United States
15 Jul 08
it sounds interesting. and many kids like indian stories...i used to dress like an indian was i was a kid. and it looks like it would attract both girls and boys. (if i wrote i kids story, i would probably make it too girlie and boys wouldnt like it). go for it...
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@danishcanadian (28954)
• Canada
15 Jul 08
That's a fantastic story with a very good moral. I have written a few children's stories, that I'd like to publish, but none with morals like hat. Mine were based on events that happened to my relaties when they were children.
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@horsesrule (1957)
• United States
18 Jul 08
I like that story, it's definitely the kind of thing that I would pick up. It would be great with some bold colorful illustrations too, maybe some in the style of Paul Goble. So I'm definitely giving a thumbs up, go for it!!
