What he should do?
January 17, 2011 9:31am CST
Hi everyone... i am planning a new story to my novel and here i need your comments and suggestions before writing.... The story is.... say, X and Y are good friends and X marries A(girl), but Y loved A. just before her marriage, Y knew that A loves X more than him so he sacrificed his love for the sake of A and most beloved friend X. As time has passed by and already 7 years are over and not a single kid to their family, so X decided for a health check up and found that X's reproductions system is failure and unable to give birth a child.... Later both spouses decided to take a fetus from someone else and they have found that Y is the perfect person for it. So, as A has wished to sleep a night with y, X had no complaint either and thus she get pregnant.... and later is uncompleted... So, my question is ... should Y be ready quickly for the proposal of X and A? Should Y cheat her Hubby only for a child? What should happen later in this story? A positive one or negative one? Major comments on suggestions will be granted. And be sure this will be an enovel for all of you written by Shibham. Help..... thanks in advance.
• United States
17 Jan 11
That is a treasure trove of emotion!! You could take the direction that A's love for Y has inexplicably grown over the years she has been married to X and the thought of having his baby is like water to a person dying of thirst--but she knows it is wrong and she owes her husband more than just her loyalty. As she wrestles with the thought of consummating her love with Y she is also wondering if she will be cheating her husband X in other ways--she loves Y more than X and is living a life of deceit, cheating her husband emotionally. As for X, he is hoping a baby will renew their marriage because he is secretly in love with Y's wife--something he does not admit even to himself. And Y's wife, unknown to everyone, despises men and is only married because it is the only socially acceptable way for a woman to be socially accepted--she was abused as a child by her father/cousin/whatever and much prefers being with women--or prefers no one, you choose. She pretends well, though, and Y believe she really loves him and he adores her and she is taking A's place in his heart. Lots of possibilities here!
17 Jan 11
I think friend... i was not able to make you understood the story. X,Y, and A were good friends from college and X and A had great love but Y too loved her silently to which A was totally ignorant about. later Y remain unmarried and X and A's family built but no child to them, hence they requested Y to support them. Remind it Y is still unmarried. Suggestion again.....?
18 Jan 11
No dragon. i think i am not about to bring any financial condition.... Okay i want to make it a tragic story but the ending should be comic so that no one get hurt anyway. Again, i am thinking to establish Y as an unmarried who already sacrificed his love for the happiness of X and A and still unmarried. I just want to put a truth here that sacrifice means a lot than a love relation and whatever you are in love or not but you are bound to bow in front of sacrifice. Please enlighten me.... Regards.. Shibham.
• Bangalore, India
17 Jan 11
Hi brother this seems lots of complications.. you can add so much emotions to this that first A disagrees and for her husband's sake later agrees but the Y refuses the invitation as he already moved on with his life.. then Y has already married and has a kid.. and finally he and his wife agrees to give their second child to this couple and this people also ready to adopt the child.. so story ends happily..
21 Jan 11
Yeah sis. I agree. My latest novel was all about to be bound here where i raised a topic where a brother married his sister unknowingly. Dont mind please. We are writer and we have the freedom to establish the reality. Please again. I am thinking to translate it to english. Let me think about your points. Nice suggestions. Anyway. Have a nice dream.
17 Jan 11
Shibham! My mind rebels against this theme because I prefer it if they adopt a child instead of going for this ; if it has to be a child borne by A then she can carry the seed of an unknown donor ; now, because you want this to be a novel there is scope for plenty of negative emotions, interactions, sentiments here especially if the man Y gets attached to the child and now X is in left in the lurch. I have seen a similar story where the reverse situation of a man donating his sperm to an unknown girl takes place. Here the man and the second woman get to know each other and though the first wife [who had been diagnosed to be sterile and who is the one who has engineered the whole surrogate mother idea ]is very much in love with the husband the husband goes after the second woman and the couple split.But the second girl[surrogate mother ]also leaves him.FInally, the wife comes back and agrees to take care of the child because she loves children and the film ends happily. If the wife cheats the husband then the husband should suspect her, feel bad about it and leave her.
21 Jan 11
If A wish to have a baby on her womb? then? I am thinking this way. I am thinking not to no input any negative sentiments in this issue. I know it would be a controversial writings but i always wish to be a writer on same. lol. Have a nice day and thanks for your suggestions.