A Small Success On Helium!

United States
January 5, 2009 6:53am CST
But I'm still really happy about it! :D I just posted a "novel excerpt" on Helium yesterday...when it was first posted it started out as 87/170...I checked it today, expecting some kind of small change...and imagine my surprise when in just 1 day my excerpt had moved up to 8/170!!! :D That made me smile, a lot! If you'd like to read it for yourself, please do! I'd appreciate any feedback to make it EVEN better! http://www.helium.com/items/1284389-novel-excerpts-suspense-creative-writing-fiction Thanks!!
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10 responses
@irishidid (8734)
• United States
5 Jan 09
Very nice. I'm 9/87 under Magical Fantasy myself. I don't mind taking a look at all and would appreciate your reading mine too. http://www.helium.com/items/1013206-novel-excerpts-magical-fantasy
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@irishidid (8734)
• United States
5 Jan 09
First quick impression. The sentences seemed a bit choppy. Make them flow better. Too much telling and not enough showing. You want to make your reader feel like he is living the scene. All in all a good start with room for improvement. Work on your hook because that's what get the reader's interest.
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• United States
5 Jan 09
Man I just went back to your profile to look at more articles and you're kind of intimidating! lol. I feel like I shouldn't try to give you any advice on your articles, you've had a lot more success on helium then me!! :D Congrats on that.
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@irishidid (8734)
• United States
5 Jan 09
Thank you for the suggestion. Sometimes a different eye looking at our work is a good thing! Bean Sidhe is a stoat (when she isn't something else), which is explained in another part of the novel. Always Bean Sidhe, never just Bean! Bean Sidhe would be more familiar to you as Banshee.
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• United States
19 Jan 09
I will go read it now:) The rating system can be a great boost to your ego. But it can deflate it as well. I had a similar experience, but in reverse. I submitted an article I thought would trample the competition, only to notice it hang down at 58 out of 80-something. I went back and leapfrogged it a couple weeks later, and BAM it jumped up to somewhere in the teens. I let it sit for a while and watched it crawl back down to rest around 25 or close to it. So I leaped it again, and watched it jump up to the single digits. It has now dropped down and rested in the teens...I think 17 or so, but there have been more articles written to the title, so its ranked higher. I think its fun, encouraging, stressful, and discouraging to watch my rankings....
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• United States
19 Jan 09
Yeah, mine bounce around quite a bit too! When I notice one is doing really well, I barely have enough time to get excited about it before it goes back down again! lol
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• United States
16 Jan 09
Is there a referral link I can join under? :D
• United States
17 Jan 09
To Helium? NO refferal link
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• United States
22 Jan 09
it's no problem! i use a seperate email for money earning online so i dont mind if that one gets spammed ;] i just need to be able to find the activation emails and stuff! so ill friend you and i'll go ahead and PM it to you! thanksssss ?
• United States
22 Jan 09
Okay, i'll send you the link and I hope you have success on the site! I accepted your invite so I'll just watch for your message Thanks
@swatig (1187)
• India
15 Jan 09
Im very much new to Helium site but writing frm long-ago. i not understnd tht rules n regulation of helium. can u suggest me something, hw to improve rating there, im mentioning the link here of helium site articles. http://www.helium.com/users/488357/show_articles
• United States
16 Jan 09
Just, the more you write the more you earn. And I do take time in the week to rate too--because the more you rate other articles the more you'll be successful. And don't hesitate the ask people on here to read your artiles, that will earn you a few pennies. Spread the word. And if you have friends who like to write--get them to join under your name. And if you'd like, I can show you a site that I've had quite a bit of success on, maybe even a little faster paced then Helium. I haven't submitted as much there, so I don't have more money than I do at helium--but based on content/earnings ratio it's really fast! Let me know if you're interested--and I can tell you more about it. I tried the link you gave but it didn't work :(
@swatig (1187)
• India
16 Jan 09
Thanks for your advice. i dnt knw wht happen to the link. may be it will works. http://www.helium.com/items/1293383-how-does-the-health-of-a-river-affect-the-vitality-of-a-region
• United States
17 Jan 09
Shoot! That link didn't work either!
@JOIEMARVIC (2342)
• Philippines
19 Jan 09
congratulations.i wish my reviews would do good like yours in that site.i have been inactive for quite a while in that site because of my work.But when i do find time again,i will work on it again. Have a nice day and goodluck to our writing endeavors.
• United States
19 Jan 09
Well my articles do good and bad there lol. I have some ranked pretty well, then others pretty bad :P When you get back to it make sure to send me a link and I'll read your articles!
@Jenaisle (3803)
• Philippines
12 Jan 09
Congrats Lily, that's quite a feat. Wow. 8 out of 170. It must be really good. I will visit and read it now, thanks for sharing. btw, we can connect at helium, so we could visit each other's pages. Good luck to both of us this year 2009.
• United States
13 Jan 09
Thank you! :D I hope it's good! lol. I'm going to get my dad to help me edit the whole story soon (he writes a lot too), so hopely it'll be even better after that!:D Defeniatly let me know what you think of it, and defeniatly invite me when you get to my page! I'll be watchin for your invite! Thanks!
@4mymak (1796)
• Malaysia
7 Jan 09
Great story... i really enjoyed it.. what happens next ??.. can.. why was Bennet beaten up, and who is Jeff, really.. a superhero ? do tell when you continue / finish the story...
• United States
7 Jan 09
Well you learn the answers to your questions from the parts in the story before what I submitted, but I'll be happy tp answer! :) Bennet is beaten up because he's a lawyer who refuses to represent a company, and instead is representing the victims. And to say the least, the comanpy isn't thrilled! lol Jeff is really just one of Bennet's partners. He isn't the one who beat the guys up. Again, if you had the rest of my story you'd know that! :D Jeff is pretty much a secondary character in my story. What you just read is where he's first mentioned. And there's only one or two more pages left of the story after it. It's a short story, 12 pages total :p
• India
6 Jan 09
i am happy that you got your novel on the 8th position. Can you help me with helium? actually i have written 4 articles at helium and are pretty well rated, but still i am not earning even a cent. I wonder if rating affects my progress too. so please tell me what are the hurdles that i have to jump over to start earning at helium?
• United States
7 Jan 09
Well the more you write the more you will earn, trust me! I have I think 45 or 46 articles on there right now. But you earn off of how many people read your article. NOT based on when they see it in the "rating" section. But say, you give me a link to your Home Page (go ahead :P) and I'll go to your site, read all your articles...and that'll earn you credit for $$. If you're interested I can send you a link for a new site I found that I'm earning faster there then I am at helium, and I've submitted less! :) And the best thing about this site is you can submit stuff you've submitted elsewhere! Let me know if you're interested :)
@carolbee (16241)
• United States
6 Jan 09
Good job. Was sitting on the edge of my chair as I was reading your article. I do think you have a nice career ahead of you writing. Much success to you in the future. Happy New Year, carolbee
• United States
7 Jan 09
Aww thank you very much carolbee! I'm glad you like it :D I would LOVE if I got some kind of writing career, dont have to be real successgful-anything in writing would make me happy :P
@stephcjh (32327)
• United States
5 Jan 09
That is wonderful. I am happy for you too. I hope you have a great New Year.
• United States
5 Jan 09
Thank you :P I defeniatly took it as good news! Just a small thing to help brighten my day a little bit.